Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Regarding the issue that whether the advertisement towards young children should be allowed, different people hold divergent opinions. Some people maintain the standpoint that this kind of ads should be banned for it can mislead the children to the wrong direction. I partly agree with their notion. However,from my point of view,television advertising directed towards young children should be available.
Firstly,the advertisement towards young children make them acquire more knowledge and broaden their horizon. As we all know, the advertisement is usually made with special design and beautiful photograph. When the children see this kind of things,they tend to figure out what is in this ads and how it works. During the process to know about the elements in ads, they are improving themselves and acquire valuable knowledge which they can't learn from school. Last Sunday, my cousin Glenn, came to my home and watched the TV. Suddenly, he came to me to ask what is in that ads.It turned out to be the Faraday Cage, which is a typical object in an experiment.At that time, he was getting curious in electricity and express hunger for learing about it.
Secondly,the ads played on television make their parents know what their children really like and foster them in that way. Children all like watching cartoons, so they tend to focus on the ads played in the break. Parents should notice the looking on their kids to determine what they are really interested in.As a saying goes,the interest is the best teacher.Lang lang,a famous Chinese pianist,was found to have talents and interests in piano when his parents noticed that he became so excited once there were ads containing piano played on TV.So they started to train him to play the piano from a young age, and becoming a famous pianist eventually.
It is undeniable that the ads can sometimes mislead the children to a wrong way, like violence or sexual items.But with the supervising of the parents, the children can get lots of things benefit themselves than the harmful things. THis matters most in the young age of a person.
To sum up, whereas there is an argument that the advertisement towards the children, namely misleading them to a bad way, broadening their horizon, coupled with letting parents know what their children really like and train them in such field makes a strong case for allowing television advertising directed towards young children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, whereas, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70878201412 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5275 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.90891444 48.9658058833 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 127.25 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207546920214 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832884524769 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765544037789 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138734047304 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923606371025 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.