Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The importancre of family varies from country to country depending on their cultures. When it comes to the question wehter the extended family such as grandfather, cousin, uncle and so on is less important now than in the past, people adopt spread spectrum of attitudes depending on their characters and educational backgrounds. On the one hand there are people who adhere to the belief that although people have several difficulties in their life, family memebers are as important as the past; on the other hand, others believe that familiy memebrs are less important nowadays. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter view carries further weight since not only do people have less time to visit their family members but also does modern life bring them some difficulties which they may sometimes forget their family memebrs.
People nowadays spend less time with their family memebrs. In fact, living in big cities create a gap between family members due to the presence of financial and career issues. In other words, people nowadays need to work long hours in order to deal with financial burden and fulfil their family' expectation. hence, when they come back to their home, their tiredness make them unable to travel to other part of city to visit their parents or uncles. Furthermore, there are also some difficulties about raising children which really take people's time. For instance, taking children to school, buying them clothes or nursing them when they are ill will take a lot of people' time. Subsequently, provided people want to value their family memebrs, they do not have time to visit them.
What's more, people nowadays like to interact with person with who they have a lot in common. In other words, people value friends more than their familiy since they have chosen them. Living big cities provide poeple an opportunity to acquaint diversity of people with different cultures, characters and personalities and become friends with them depending on their personalities and characters. Therefore, people spend most of their time with their firends since they help them to be happy when they are in difficult situation. Consequently, family memebr are less important since people can find new friend who are more helpful to them.
To wrap it up, family memebrs are losing their importance since not only does modern life make people very busy and out of time to visit their family memebrs but also does big cities allow people to find new firends with whom they have a lot in common . I personally value my parents and family members although I amreally involved in my daily life. \
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... really take peoples time. For instance, taking children to school, buying them c...
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...hey do not have time to visit them. Whats more, people nowadays like to interact ...
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...ends with whom they have a lot in common . I personally value my parents and famil...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, may, really, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2180.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01149425287 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46083215668 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47816091954 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.28063472 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.111111111 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116767665224 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519673388438 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044381465686 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0881232274123 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415166523157 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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