Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that family in every given society play a pivotal role in people's lives and every mature human being has to admit that success is a blank dream without having a good family. Stemming from this fact, a relevant question that is a moot point is whether in today's hectic city of life extended family play a less important role than in the past time. Due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general argument on this issue. I am, however, to a great extent of the conviction that today with the advent of new technology, which has changed our lifestyle dramatically, family lose its importance to the extent that we can see a gap vividly among members of families. The following paragraphs will aptly substantiate my personal stance.
To commence with, although new technologies make our lives more convenient and help us to make a progress day in day out, they create a serious gap between families and make them less important. Generally phrased, gone are those days that family members gathered in a reunion and talked about various matters of life in order to get informed of many things that happen to them. As a tangible example, today's children have used to spend their precious time with electronic advice like a smart phone, tablet, the internet and so forth. In fact, they allocate less time to the family and they are not willing to get informed of their family, uncles, aunts, cousins and other members of a family. In such case, can not only people especially children grow maturely but also can't enhance their social skills in order to be the sociable person. To elucidate more on this issue, people in the past knew their importance of each other and bend over backward to help and address each other's difficulties when they ran into a huge problem and faced trials and tribulations.
Another reason that should not go unnoticed is that the living situation in the past was better than now and human beings live conveniently. To put it in another word, nowadays people are confronting inflation and economic recession in the society, which make living condition harder. Indeed, in the past, people prefer to live in a large family with more children but now people are inclined toward the opinion that the fewer children, fewer expenses in the life. Going into the depth, this idea of individuals represent the fact that to the extent large family was more important in the past. However, in today's hectic world people prefer to live in an extended family owing to the crowds of advantages it has like helping children to rise up their social activities, not spend their time with phone or tablet, no getting online and so forth. In this situation, people can joy their lives and share their ideas and lead a healthy life.
In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
... play a less important role than in the past time. Due to the controversial nature of thi...
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Line 3, column 771, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ecially children grow maturely but also cant enhance their social skills in order to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, as to, in fact, by and large, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78181818182 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47937312495 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529292929293 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4927422682 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173403652835 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537875773817 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507102871409 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0915438462479 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564717811685 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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