Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Nowadays, celebrities play a pivotal role in the societies. A controversial question among scholars regarding this matter is whether celebrities opinions are more important to younger people than they are to older people. I contend famous people such as entertainers and athletes have more influence on younger people. In the following paragraphs I will discuss the most important reasons supporting my viewpoint.
The first reason is that young people take celebrities as role models. Young people want to be successful and famous in the future so they look up to people who have paved their way towards success and try to imitate them. That's because they think by doing so they have more common with the celebrities and they are more like them. For example, a celebrity's hair and fashion style becomes common among the young people and a lot of young people try to copy them. That's why most of the companies producing fashion related items such as cloth and shoes try to show their products used by celebrities in the advertisements, to increase selling their products. Taking them as role models, young people are influenced by celebrities.
Another important reason is that young people have little experience in life. They have little knowledge and are building their believes and are experiencing life. Therefore, they are more vulnerable to other people's, especially famous people, suggestions and guidance. However, older people have enough experience to do not be affected by other's opinions. They mainly act based on their own experiences and values that have learned in life. Having lower experience in life young people are more susceptible to others opinions.
To sum it up, young people look up to celebrities as role models thus they are more influenced from celebrities compared to the young people. Moreover, older people have enough experiences to decide on their own.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17647058824 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73590898985 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496732026144 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9041935031 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285426103632 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103116266251 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849537214196 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197618810135 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961309135515 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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