Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.
Everyone wants to have a happy life. People participate in different activities to meet their needs. Some people are of the opinion that people who are surrounded us determine our happiness while others believe that our job has a greater effect on it. There is an old saying in my country which "your wealth doesn't determine your life satisfaction". However, I insist that our jobs have a significant effect on the quality of our lives which nothing could compete with it. In the following, I am willing to support my perspective by proposing two main arguments.
First and the foremost reasons lies in the fact that our jobs directly influence on our living conditions. If we were not interested in our profession, it would ruin our private lives. There are scores of example around us that people's careers made them overwhelmed and frustrated. Various factors such as salary, work environment, and people's interest affect their job satisfaction. For instance, consider a situation which a man works as taxi driver. He has to work about 10 hours each day to pay the bills and fulfill his family's needs. Moreover, he has to have a high level of concentration on the road. When he comes back to his house, he is totally enervated. Therefore, his family would be unhappy about their living condition. In the long-term, his career can destroy his life.
Another subtle factor rests on the notion that we spend a considerable amount of time in the workplace. Everyone virtually works about 35 percent of our waking hours. If people were not satisfied in their jobs, it would be hard to change it. But we can avoid those people who we do not like them. Avoidance is a good strategy for those people that you do not want to be in touch with them. But in the workplace, it is not as convenient as other places. In that case, we should be able to work with our boss or colleagues who might bother us. I concede this is highly case-dependent. It means that for some people, it might be easy to change their jobs as well as they do not like it. However, in some places such as my country, finding a job is a big challenge for young people. If they are lucky to find it, then they have to work hard to save it. In these circumstances, we cannot expect to resign as well as we do not like it. In contrast, regarding our friends, we have a high level of freedom to choose them or not.
To sum up, I would like to point out that our job has an indispensable effect on our life. Not only do we spend a great part of our lives in the workplace but it also determines our status in the society. Some professions need special requirements and have a great income while others might have fewer requirements or less salary but more satisfaction. We all should improve our knowledge and skills to get a good job and have a better welfare.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...g in my country which 'your wealth doesnt determine your life satisfaction'....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, in contrast, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 87.0 43.0788530466 202% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2328.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55577299413 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69642749513 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499021526419 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.1788017342 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.5454545455 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4848484848 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122934259613 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.029757009722 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043013119576 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.083683421322 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597319151546 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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