Do you agree or disagree: In order to succeed in study or job，the ability to adjust or adapt to changing condition or circumstance is more important than having knowledge.
It is tempting to think that the ability to adjust to chaning circumstance will keep people from wasting opportunities, leading to a better chance to succeed in study or job. Nevertheless, from my perspective, having knowledge is more important than the capability of adapting to different conditions.
On the one hand, without surficient knowledge, the senseitivity to know when to make a change is useless and uneffective. Being flexiable is to know the timing of changes while having adequite knowledege is to understand how to make actions on that jugement. If one could only sense the opportunity but not to take advantage of it, then the ability of adapt to changing consition is worthless. The Blackberry company, for instance, losts amost all of its' market share due to their less advanced technologe of producing cell phones. In less than ten years, Blackberry's once safest and most popular phones are beaten by its' strong competitors such as the iPhone of Apple. Most people would assume that Blackberry is lost becasue they were unable to detect changes the needs of maket, which is the fancy trends of smartphones. However, few people noticed that Blackberry indeed designed several models of smartphones but fewer people chosed to buy them. These phones were less advanced in their functions and had a opperating systems that could not compared to that of Apple's. The real reason for Blackberry' loss is not unwillingness to make a change, but the lack of knowlege about producing fancy phones.
On the other hand, knowledge determines the direaction of the changes of circumstances and thus are more important. People who hold different view confuse about the cause-and-result relationship betweent flexiability and knowledge. Changes of environment often follows the undates of knowledge. The industrial revolution, for example, happened merely after the invention of many mechines and the improvements of argurcutural. No matter how sharp one is, no one could forsee the changes of production for the whole man kind if not having access to certain knowledge.
Admittedly, being unable the adapt in changing environment could make one's effort in vain as he or she works in wrong direction. Nonetheless, many attempts to changes are fale but people are able to see them. Efforts put in these experimential moves are not effective as well. As a result, no one could tell what is effective and what is not beforehand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1011, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ess advanced in their functions and had a opperating systems that could not compa...
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Line 13, column 26, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nowledge. Admittedly, being unable the adapt in changing environment could make ones...
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Line 13, column 71, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...dapt in changing environment could make ones effort in vain as he or she works in wr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18734177215 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98182713483 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556962025316 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.889245239 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.45 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204077824032 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563818448989 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601468536027 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13816907673 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0916951599103 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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