Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking websites.
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated world where we live, technology have influences on a wide variety of humans in every age, and it would be hard to keep pace with this fast-changing modern era. While some people hold the view that all individuals can keep on doing their works same as the past, others, standing on the end of the continuum, believe that spending a lot of time in order to use the technologies like cellphones cause a lot of people especially students to be educated hardly. As far as I am concerned, I concur with the latter notion because not only does spending time on websites and cellphone attract a lot of people unintentionally, but students also need to less energy in order to use this technology. In the line to follow, I will elaborate upon my reasons.
First and foremost, by using technologies such as online games, it would be hard for teachers and parents to teach and educate the children because these technologies are more appealing to students. For more clarification, the students have a pleasure time while they are either chatting with their friends or sharing their ideas through social groups on the internet. Consequently, the more they have fun while they are working with the technology, the more they spend time on it, and they would not be aware of the times going on. Take my personal experience as an example. I remember when I was 16 years old, and I bought a cellphone for the first time. Although I have been a talented and hardworking student during my education, I spent a lot of times on using the phone in order to chat with my friends, or search in websites due to being aware of news about my popular actors. As a result, by getting involved in the issues through using the cellphone, I had less time to study, and I even could not feel that how much time I am working with it. After seeing my grades, too lower that I used to get before, I shocked because of being aware of the negative impact of the cellphone. In fact, had I control using my cellphone, I would have been able getting better grades.
The last but not the least reason why I corroborate on this perspective lies in the fact that due to spending less energy, students are intended to use the technology rather than study. To be more specific, students have to write their homework, which their teachers assigned them, too precisely, and memorize the lessons in order to get an appropriate result. Using the technology, on the other hand, does not need any efforts, and people just take a rest while they are using it. An example of my personal life can drives this notion home. When I have to do a lot of works for my professor, and I have to spend a lot of time and energy to do my best, I prefer to take a rest and escape from my responsibilities by using the online games. As a matter of fact, having played online games, I would feel relax and have fun rather than studying and working hard.
All in all, by taking all the examples and reasons, mentioned previously, into account, it is crystal clear that it would take a lot of energy to make the students study with the existence of technology. Since using technology is appealing for most people whether intentionally or not, they would be more intendant to use it rather than doing their jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'to lower'?
Suggestion: to lower
...orking with it. After seeing my grades, too lower that I used to get before, I shocked be...
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Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'drive'
Suggestion: drive
... it. An example of my personal life can drives this notion home. When I have to do a l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, while, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2701.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 595.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53949579832 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93888872473 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62513584074 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447058823529 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 864.9 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.0316673355 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.619047619 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168765366236 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538171943722 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517246080347 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101469503274 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552734783484 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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