The extended family is less important now than in the past.
It is generally agreed that the world has changed significantly during the last decades and these changes also made us less connected with our extended families. Personally, I am prone to believe that we pay less importance to our relations with our close relatives than we did in the past. I hold this opinion since nowadays people are more focused on their careers and they have less free time.
To begin with, each person tries to succeed in his or her profession. Success in the professional career means more than a possible promotion since it opens doors to a more comfortable life with higher salaries, more friends, and so on. Overall, we will not be mistaken if we argue that efficiency in the work increases the social status of a person. For example, I work as a lawyer in a legal company for many years. I had a lot of achievements in my work and as a result I am now the leading legal consultant of the company. This in turn makes me an important person not only in the firm, but also in my community, where all try to get my advice on various issues. So, professional career takes to much time from us and gets more and more importance in our life.
Additionally, we have merely no time to communicate with our grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles. The life is very dynamic nowadays. We may need to be in the other part of the world by business issues, or to get new education to attract potential employers and so on. For instance, my wife is a PhD student, and she tries to receive her extra education in order to be able to compete with other professionals in her field. Thus, our daily obligations, daily routine or future plans take a lot of time from us.
To sum up briefly, our interests, needs, and values have changed a lot. Nowadays we are less connected to our close relatives that we used to be in the recent past. This is because we are more concentrated on our personal needs and our personal interests than we were a few decades ago.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 698, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...s issues. So, professional career takes to much time from us and gets more and mor...
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Line 4, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...terests than we were a few decades ago.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46944444444 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65476365459 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547222222222 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6161045087 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3888888889 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133197849987 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379698032795 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508095169778 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0887597792418 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741585065324 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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