the extended family member is less important now than it was in the past.

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the extended family member is less important now than it was in the past.

as people regard family as an essential part of their lives more and more, which the number of the family become a hot issue all over the world. some people suggest that large family member has a great advantages, while others have opposite view. as far as I am concerned, latter point carrier more wieght because, not only have globalization influence on people's life, but also population life styles have changed.

first, nowaday, the extensive family with a large number of members is less essential as opposed to the past. the most important reasons should taken into account is tha globalization. As a role, the advancement of technology in the recent years, persons are eagerly try to progress in the entire aspect of own life such as education, career, and so forth. on the other hand, they tend to attain the novel opportunities and great chnces to improving their abilities. therefore, the statistic of immigration to advanced countries has increased remarkably. as a result, indivituals migrate and live far from their family because they get more benefits from highly small family. for example, I migrated to the europe 6 years ago after graduated from college. that is because I wanted to develope in my major and also find appropriate job. thus, I seperated from my large fmily owing to my desire. now, I have family with three members.

second, the general population's lifestyles has altered noticebly. obviously, in this era, people tendency towards numerous and modern requirments has promoted. in addition, the lifestyle of everyone in different branches like housing, nourishing, dressing, etc. has modified. consequently, for affordig these sort of demands, a huge amount of money required and persons should word hardly to obtain cash. on the contrary, one person cannot provides money for all anormous family's member. so one prefer to live with at least family members. for instance,Although I and my husband work for a long hours, we faced with various challenges for supply our primitive needs and welfare of our child. Finally, I can envision how difficult it is to live in a large family member with a number of styles, principles, and demands.

In conclusion, taking into account, less family members is inevitable parts of today’s family, because of both globalization effects paly important role and new lifestyle came into being.
 

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, such as, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16795865633 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81111774979 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614987080103 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5466852886 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9090909091 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5909090909 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.59090909091 5.45110844103 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.5376344086 488% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183764927934 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481488268975 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667343004137 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113286172378 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349001619856 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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