famous people privacy
Nowadays, with the widespread use of social media, people's privacies have taken a leap. Anybody can take a picture and share it online and thousands of people can see that photo in the split of a second. Famous people are suffering from this lack of privacy more than others. The nature of being famous, obligates them to have less privacy in comparison to normal people, but there should be a boundary to it. In my opinion Famous people, whether they are models, entertainers or acters, need to have more privacy. It is benefitable for us, as well as them.
All people have some moments in their life which are private for them, and if those moments get public, it would rub them of their meaning. Although we are social creatures, we all need to be alone sometimes in order to find ourselves. I think with the excessive work of reporters, famous people can not even have that little time for themselves and it can hurt them greatly. For instance, my uncle is a well-known actor. When his first child was born, he just wanted to spend some time with his wife and his new son, but the reporters did not respect his time. They ruined that special experience for him.
If we look at the problem from another aspect, we see that it is not good for people to know this much about celebrities. It is in the nature of the human brain to compare things together. When we constantly see the body of professional athletes or the wealth of rich actors, whether we know it or not, we are comparing ourselves to them. This can hurt our self-esteem. The photoshopped and overestimated pictures we see in the news and social media can greatly hurt our sense of worth. My own experience is a compelling illustration of this. I used to see model's photos on Instagram and compare myself to them. Last year I saw one of those models from up close in the street and recognized her. She was beautiful and fit, but not merely as beautiful and fit as her pictures on Instagram. I found out that I was comparing myself to a photoshopped photo and never believed those exaggerated images again.
In sum, though some may oppose, I think we should give famous people more privacy. Not only it is good for them, but it is also good for us. We should give them time for their private moment and do not rub them with their special experiences. Moreover, we must not follow their news and compare ourselves to them, because sometimes that news is just fake.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, well, for instance, i think, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53863636364 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48812780192 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493181818182 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9508215515 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8076923077 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9230769231 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19230769231 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200761718791 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579919239945 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101429367495 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146076893633 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145878089845 0.0645574589148 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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