In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
People have been debating a lot about why humans` lifetime has been increasing. Personally, I think it is because, these days, the mankind has advanced medicine and technology. There are a few reasons why I hold this opinion.
First of all, progress in medicine has given people a myriad of medicaments to treat a variety of ailments. Before the beginning of the last century, millions of people worldwide died from numerous infections such as the Plague, tuberculosis, and cholera. Nowadays, the mankind has vaccines and antibiotics, which help us to prevent and cure these life-threatening illnesses. When people have plenty of medicine to defeat diseases, they can live longer. My own experience is a good example of that. When I was a twelve years old child, I was suffering from pneumonia – a highly contagious, dangerous disease, but because I was given antibiotics by doctors in a local children`s hospital, I was successfully cured. Moreover, after the recovery, I was vaccinated for the disease in the same medical facility. As a result, to this day, I have never been contaminated. In this way, the modern medications helped me survive the deadly sickness and became a healthy adult.
Secondly, contemporary technology has decreased the intensity of people`s manual labor. These days, we have a lot of equipment available to perform physically arduous for the human being work, which our ancestors had to accomplish with their own hands. If a person is not exposed to physically exhausting activities, he/she can stay healthy and enhance his/her life expectancy. For instance, I recall my grandfather`s tales about how after the World War Two, citizens of my country had to reconstruct Russia from ruins. They did not have the machinery to build new roads, bridges, and homes – they had to do it manually. This kind of labor was incredibly hard for the people and it resulted in a variety of health problems and sudden deaths. On the other hand, the new generation of the Russians use technological equipment to create new towns and cities, and therefore, they are not stressed out by the tremendously difficult labor. This is one of the reasons why my contemporaries live longer lives.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that constant development in medicine and technology let people extend their lives. This is because it contributes to their well-being by providing them with effective drugs for a healing and with helpful tools for work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16336633663 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0829344551 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579207920792 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2432099481 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8181818182 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3636363636 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126605446303 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408178023959 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051414891708 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763378203417 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00674412923774 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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