Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
With the increasing prosperity of the economy and the continuous harmony of the society, art and athletics have become one of the indispensable parts in our daily life. However, here comes a question: should governments spend more money in art than athletics? Two antithetical viewpoints can be identified, one contending that it is important to invest money for art so as to help art develop and preserve art works, while the other stressing that sports should be given higher priority. Personally speaking, I am for the latter, in that sports act as a booster for public health and facilitate to build a better national image.
To begin with, athletics deserve sponsorship owing to its contribution to the increase of public health. With the incidence of the sudden death and cancer hovering at high levels, many have become aware of the significance of maintaining health, and sports is just suitable to improve physical fitness. Exercising everday can help improve Cardiopulmonary capacity, since sports usually need a large participation of one's lung and heart. In this sense, the total health of a person is improved, thereby boosting the public health accordingly. For example, the government of Shanghai provides many local communities with funds, of which the purpose is to build more exercising facilities in the communities, so that the people there can directly go for sports after work or school. Then a sophisticated survey is carried out by Shanghai government, whose results provide evidence for the improvement of public health compared with past data.
Furethermore, internationally speaking, sports can act as a determinant fatcor of national image. The competition nowadays is a matter of capital and fund. With more government investment, the coaching team can be improved, so that some of the top-level coaches and physical therapists can be on the team to render their experience and help the player stay physcially ready for the game. Also, the training condition can be ameliorated. The aiding fund from the government can be utilized to renovate the courts and add more gymnastical facilities. Hence, we can see that the team will be capable of cultivating more potential medal winners with more abundant financial support. Then, for instance on Olympic games, they can reach higer level of achievements, which can bring tremendous glory to the country and its people. Therefore, the national image of the country will be remarkably lifted.
Although some advocates of art may argue that the national image can also be improved by art, it is true that art is not fitted for everybody due to its obscurity and indirectness. Work and family are already two huge burdens for most adults to shoulder in their life, which gives them more excuses to relax during their spare time rather than enjoying some artwork they can not understand. Hence, sports can benifit more people and truly impact most people's life.
In a nutshell, the merits of sponsoring athletic prevail over those of art, due to the contributing role of sports in public health, the sports' positive effect on national image and the broader audiences of sports. As a conclusion, it is the best for the country to invest more money in sports rather than art.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2726.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13370998117 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84677873313 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523540489642 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5159055835 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.52173913 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0869565217 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91304347826 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204460957434 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619177801626 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873556613691 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121055532881 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064253819995 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 86.8835125448 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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