Do you agree or disagree with the statement: the more money people have, the more money they should give away to charity.
When one of the richest man in China, Jack Ma, was complained by some portions of the general public that he failed to donate money for national charities, the wealthy and wise man rationally responded, " I made all my achievements on my own, so I was endowed the right to spend my money the way I wanted." Galloping improvement of living standards make people financially undreamed. It is partly deemed that wealthy individuals are obliged to give their money to charities because great power comes to great responsibility. Albeit seemingly plausible, I am convinced that there should be no such moral standard in our society that the rich should make more donation than others.
For one thing, one's bright future is held in the palm of his or her own hand, which renders capable people their rights to allocate their properties out of external controls. Having a glimpse of the current social condition, we can find that it is stepping into an increasingly competitive stages. Accompanying this trend are more and more dilemmas and obstacles that challenge people on their ways to success. As a matter of fact, being successful is never an easy task, but involves the combined effects of tremendous efforts and self-reliance. Under no circumstances should people be forced give up their own fruits of diligence and intelligence when confronted with so-called responsibility of donating. In our colorful history, many collapses of government owed much to citizen's lack of ability to control their own properties. There is not a better manifestation than my country. Chinese government once advocated the vast acceptance of general social equality) in which all people should be wealthy equally and force wealthy people to take money from their wallets. Therefore, hard-working people were not endowed the basic right over their necessary returns, which considerably discouraged producers and managers. When disappointed people refused to work anymore, China was confronted with one of the greatest economic recession in history. Consequently, the ability to spend money as people's will should be guaranteed.
On top of that, earning money is a process that is equal to contributing to the society, therefore no more obligation should be given to wealthy people. Well-known is the truth that money is the tool of exchanging values in market. For those who accumulate a huge number of money, they produce far more values compared to others, contributing extensively to the world. For instance, Bill Gates invoked unprecedented innovations on computer programming; Jack Ma brought a successful revolution to Chinese market; Ellon Max advanced aerospace industry of humans with great leaps and bounds. All of these examples tell us one thing: earning money is never the purpose but the process along with making contributions to the world for those elites. Besides, as our society has witnessed great boom concerned with economics, mature taxation systems are being implemented around the world, which ensures the social fairness. According to the survey conducted by Chinese Social Science Journal, people with income of over one million dollars are paying fifty percent for taxation from their income. Those money flow into other public construction under the control of government, including charity as well. Therefore, what else can we want from people with great contributions?
Judging from all the evidence offered, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that wealthy people are never ought to be required more financial support to charity due to the reason that they are given the priority to take control of their money and contributions have already be made by them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... was complained by some portions of the general public that he failed to donate money for nati...
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Line 5, column 1092, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'Those moneys', 'Those monies'?
Suggestion: This money; Those moneys; Those monies
...percent for taxation from their income. Those money flow into other public construction und...
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Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ir money and contributions have already be made by them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, as a matter of fact, for one thing, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3104.0 1977.66487455 157% => OK
No of words: 588.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27891156463 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9242980521 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88047245599 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 323.0 212.727598566 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549319727891 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 973.8 618.680645161 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.4211537032 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277137152398 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807529859713 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574707409217 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181789737688 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165455497996 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 174.0 86.8835125448 200% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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