if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
Choosing a job is one of the biggest challenges all people face to. When it comes to the time people should choose their job, they are not sure about choosing a secure job or a job which is satisfying to them. In my view, no matter how much a job is secured, people should always follow they dream job which make them happy. I would like to elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, people will not do good in those jobs which are not satisfying to them even if it has job security. The main point for doing a job in the best way is to love it, and when people will not act strong enough in those jobs which they do not feel good about them, should not take them. One of the biggest problem almost all societies have is a notable number of the people who do not like their job and just take them because they are secured. When we do not feel excited about our job, no matter it is secure or not, we will never do good in it. My personal life is a compelling example of this point. Last year, I got hired in a big company, and I had a great secure job. Almost all of my friends liked to have my job, but I did not have any positive attitude toward it. As the result, I was not motivated to do my tasks, and just after some months I left my job. This personal experience is one of the reasons for holding this idea that people should first like their job and after that think about its security.
Second, if people be satisfied by a job, they will do their best to make it secured. Based on bad economical situations, most of the jobs are not secure these days, but a hard worker person who truly loves his job can make it secure as well. This world has lots of people who had secure jobs, but lost them because did not have a positive opinion about it. On the other hand, many people could change the level of their job's security by hard working which is the result of loving their job. As an example I can mention my sister. When she started her dream job in a small company, she had not any security in her job. After some month, when her boss realized how much she is working hard, he offered her a higher salary, and also increased the security level of her job. Now it is the tenth anniversary of her work, and this level of security is just due to the positive feeling she had about her job which could change the security of it. My sister is a person who proved me people should love their job first and then pay attention to its security.
To sum up, lots of jobs are in the risk and people should appreciate all those chances of getting hired in a secure job, but the feeling people have toward their job is more important. By loving the job, people will do better in their job which can help to increase its security in future, and also they will thrive all hard time and can finally make their job secure. Based on these justifications, my conviction is that people should pay more attention to the job which make them satisfied rather than its security.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ut choosing a secure job or a job which is satisfying to them. In my view, no matter how much...
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Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...le will not do good in those jobs which are not satisfying to them even if it has job security. Th...
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Line 7, column 492, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hich is the result of loving their job. As an example I can mention my sister. Whe...
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Line 10, column 280, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...which can help to increase its security in future, and also they will thrive all hard tim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, then, well, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 577.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.21837088388 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.10544605998 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376083188908 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.0 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5061633977 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.36 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.08 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394542456226 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141213524526 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831168207682 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296738941198 0.150856017488 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508816636419 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.47 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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