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If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

In today’s progress and competitive world, taking a proper job in the best possible time is the most important building block of becoming a successful person in the near future. In this line of thought, there has been a controversial debate among scholars over the idea that whether people should take a secure job immediately when such an opportunity is provided for them or wait for a very satisfying job. personally speaking, I concur with the latter idea for a few reasons, two compelling ones of which are elaborated upon hereunder.

The first vital point to bear in mind is that very decent jobs provide people with both higher salary and less strain, so it is worthwhile that people wait and spend more time to achieve such great occupations. As lots of satisfying jobs today have become more specialized and more scientific thanks to the genesis of technology, taking such jobs requires sufficient time in order to get the relevant knowledge. To put it in the other word, the more satisfying the job, the higher level of knowledge it requires. However, there are many secure vocations that are convenient and do not require academic knowledge, as a result, those who are willing to choose such secure, low-paying jobs can take them without spending any time. For instance, consider professors and doctors who engage in the most satisfying and high-paid jobs in societies, it is necessary that they spend more time in colleges and universities in order to get knowledge related to their field.

Furthermore, another equally important reason which should be mentioned is that blindly and immediately entering a secure job can be a barrier towards to discover our talents, the flourishing of which heavily depends on the decisions we make for our future. Therefore, occupying such vocations will make an arduous time for individuals in their future life because these jobs are not according to their talent and abilities, and they have to work what they are not interested in. In this vein, it is more satisfying for people to work in occupations that are in their interest and talents. As a result, people should dedicate enough time to find out their talents and abilities and then try to be experienced and well-informed in a more decent job according to their talents, which can lead to a life they will willing to have in their future life.

To put it in a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons and examples, I do believe that it is better for people to wait for a more satisfying job instead of taking a secure job right away. Not only jobs that are more satisfying are high-paying and less-strain jobs, but also immediately engaging in a secure job can be an impediment to the flourishing of our talents and abilities that have been endowed on us.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Personally
...them or wait for a very satisfying job. personally speaking, I concur with the latter idea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89451476793 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77775926216 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476793248945 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.8711341704 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.714285714 100.406767564 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8571428571 20.6045352989 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480273184406 0.236089414692 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179438292981 0.076458572812 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102016727703 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313721842078 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800579964014 0.0645574589148 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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