One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
It is no secret to anyone that parents play a paramount role in one’s destiny and upbringing, and they are always concerned about their children’s future. One of the influential ways parents can prepare their young children for the future is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Although some people are the proponents of the opinion that teenage children should not work at early stages of life, others stand on the other side of the continuum. I, personally speaking, concur with the latter group, believing that parents should motivate their children in taking a part-time job. my viewpoint is based on a few reasons, two compelling ones of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that children’s sense of responsibility can be enhanced when they work or engage in a part-time job. Indeed, as one job or one task is actually a new responsibility, it makes an opportunity for children to become an experienced person in their near future. To put in other words, when parents prepare their children for future by motivating them in taking a part-time job, children learn how to be responsible since children like to do their best completely when they are entrusted with a specific task. If they do something wrong, they are taught how to take responsibility for their fault and try to correct them. My own experience is a transparent example of what I mean. When I was twelve years old, my parents encouraged me to get a part-time job as a waitress in a well-known restaurant in my hometown. While I was under the pressure of tasks in early days of work for not getting used to them, I became more and more experienced day by day and have learned many lessons from my tasks and wrongs I made. I have become very responsible to complete my duties in a precise and perfect manner, and never have I shirk my responsibility and have passed it off to others. Had I never been motivated to start working during my childhood, I would never become as responsible as I am now.
Furthermore, working and having a part-time job can transform children into an organized person in their adult life, meaning that children learn how to manage and handle their time, plan and duties since their childhood when they are engaged in a part-time job. By managing their life from the early ages of their life, they can make a hoard of money which can give them a hand to become financially independent in the future. According to my experience mentioned above, I planned to buy a car prior to attending university. In this vein, I made a plan to manage my time and salaries and would finally buy my favourite car at the due time without any need for my parents. Had I never started my work in my teenage period, I would never become as organized and independent as I am now.
To put it in a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons and examples, I firmly hold that children should be encouraged by their parents to take a part-time job. Not only does it teach children to learn how to be responsible, but it also can make them an organized and financially independent person in their adult life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, well, while, i mean, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2600.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67625899281 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80361706009 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44964028777 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1596362436 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.80952381 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4761904762 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462019742246 0.236089414692 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150377836264 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150290926873 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332004589996 0.150856017488 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810550607781 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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