Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
There is no doubt that technology has been playing a paramount role in changing the human being lifestyle for decades. One of the most special of these technologies is the internet, which has sparked some controversial debates among scholars on its pros and cons since its emergence. Some people are proponents of the claim that the scope of information the internet provides us can be problematic; however, others stand at the opposite of the continuum. I, personally, hold that access to much information on the internet is very valuable. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
First of all, access to a lot of information, in my opinion, has a fundamental effect on strengthening democracy. Indeed, the internet can play a main role in exposing corruption and keeping politician honest. In the past, there were only a few news outlets that were depended to politicians, which means that they had permission to publish only news that was in favor of them and no one dared to criticize. In contrast, today there are many news and information on the internet that are quickly published by various publicans. Almost many of them are independent valid media that are willing to expose political misbehavior. For example, an online magazine recently published a news revealing that a mayor of my hometown had taken bribes from a speculator. The report was so detailed and well-researched that the mayor had no choice but to resign. Although all knew this issue and the evidence was so clear, only this publisher was willing to write about it. This example demonstrates how access to a lot of information on the internet can strengthen democracy.
Secondly, the free exchange of information on the internet can motivate people to become politically active. In countries all over the world, people are members of at least one of the online social networking to share their information and opinions. While in the past, due to lack of access to the information and opinions of others, people might have thought they were alone in their beliefs, they can now realize that others share their ideas. My own experience indicates this concept. A few weeks ago, I learned that the government was refusing to purchase the anti-Coronavirus-medicine, which was vital for the health of people. This bothered me a lot because I saw some people passed away every day and others suffered from this fatal disease. However, I later joined a Facebook group dedicated to opposing the plan. When the members of the group found how many people in the country raged from the event, we were certain to get together and enthusiastically protest in front of the government building until our voices were heard. I feel that sharing information and finding each other on the internet gave us the courage to actively protect the health of our family.
In short, I strongly believe that the internet supplies a lot of precious information for us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...criticize. In contrast, today there are many news and information on the internet th...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...criticize. In contrast, today there are many news and information on the internet that ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, at least, for example, i feel, in contrast, in short, no doubt, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98792756539 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96769839177 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519114688129 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9266790194 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.291666667 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7083333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244087872806 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695505054828 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700519141823 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15714168037 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499757615615 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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