Imagine that a professor requires students to learn as much as possible about a subject in a short period of life. Is it better for the professor to require students to work together in a group or is it better to require students to work alone?
Throughout history, there are different problems that mankind faces and must choose an answer wisely. He can find the solution solely or can do it in a group with others’ help. There is a controversial question as to whether it is better to make this decision in a team or not? While some people are the opinion that doing it alone has lots of benefits, personally, I believe in team work for it leads us to the better points. I have several reasons for my point of view, both of which will be mentioned in the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind immediately pondering this issue is the effect of teamwork on our future lives. As we all know, while working in a company, it is crucial to know how to participate in a group activity in order to make a good relationship with other employees. If we do not have a significant ability to make good connections with our co-workers, we will not be able to progress in a job, getting a better position in the company. Although some individuals think there is no link between school period activities and gaining social skills, I strongly believe not only is there a connection between these two but also school is the best place to obtain and gain these skills. To shed more light on it, I am going to compare myself with my brother. When we were in high school, I used to do my homework with my friends as a team because our mentor forced us to do so. By forcing us to talk to each other while solving the problem our teacher taught us how to indicate our opinion in a group. On the other hand, my brother’s teacher did not do the same method and always told them to not talk to each other about questions, and do them on their own. Thus, my brother never had the experience of being in a group. Because of my teacher's viewpoint now I have a better position in my job only because of my social skills.
Secondly, in any activity, the accurate result is which be done in a short time with less mistake. In order to get to this point, the better choice that we have is nothing but teamwork. Because by doing so we can separate the whole procedure into little sections and devote each of them to a different group members. Each person in this way is to be able to focus on a particular duty and take his great steps toward solving his own portion. When all of the members have done their job when we gather them together we will confront with a comprehensive solution in a short time. As I told you my brother did not learn how to solve a problem in a group, thus, he had a lot of problems in his firm regarding this matter. They tried to do every job alone without any cooperation. Although I tried to notice him the benefits of teamwork, he did not pay attention. But eventually, 2 years ago, he came to me and ask me to teach him this precious ability. After almost 2month he understood the principal of this method which had to be done in school years by his teacher. Since that time, they have progress remarkably in their work.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments it is crucial for each pupil to understand the concepts of the working in a team because of its great influences on their future life. Therefore it is lecturers’ responsibility to encourage students to do their assignments in groups.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...help. There is a controversial question as to whether it is better to make this decision in a...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'member'?
Suggestion: member
...evote each of them to a different group members. Each person in this way is to be able ...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t steps toward solving his own portion. When all of the members have done their job ...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ps toward solving his own portion. When all of the members have done their job when we gat...
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... me to teach him this precious ability. After almost 2month he understood the princip...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... great influences on their future life. Therefore it is lecturers’ responsibility to enco...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 52.1666666667 192% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2708.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 614.0 407.700716846 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41042345277 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58882458916 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472312703583 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 852.3 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 13.0 3.51792114695 370% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4206943145 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7142857143 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67857142857 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104364536374 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0299074803501 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030884135961 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817748368363 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322426104668 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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