Imagine that you are going to visit a new city, which one of the following ways do you think is
the best way to know the city in a short time?
• Visit historic sites
• Go to shops and markets
• Enjoy the restaurant and spend time in café
It goes without saying that one of the most important avenues lead to familiar with other cultures have always been traveling to the vicinity. In this regard, especially tourists who have restricted time search for a way to explore the city in a short time. Although some people believe that a store or coffee shop is an appropriate situation for these reasons, others stand on another side of the continuum and holding a view that visiting historical monument is the best way. As for this writer’s opinion, I categorically subscribe to the later notion for quite a few reasons, two of which elaborated hereunder.
The first compelling reason is that during past centuries citizens was constructing their environment based on compatibility with their cultures, religious belief, politics, and climate while after modernism globalism ideology shapes structures. As a result, places such as shopping centers or restaurants do not represent civilization. By the way of illustration, over the span of 2001 __2002 when I was a senior student at the faculty of sociology, I should travel to the middle east, in order to collect data for completing my thesis. However, I faced a complicated situation; on the one hand, I did not have much time to spend, since I should study for the postgraduate entrance exam too. On the other hand, I had to know important characters of cities in this area. Only when I consulted with my mother who is a prominent architect, did I realize how carefully perform it. Precisely speaking, thanks to technology, I was surfing the Internet and found historical monuments in each city. Therefore, I just went to historical zones and took pictures from buildings as well as interviewed with professional and local persons. In this way, analyzing the information let me get familiar with cities in the shortest time as possible.
Furthermore, historical zones not only reveal ones’ point of view is a cost-effective way as well. It is crystal clear that in the virtual world of the binary number, money is a key component; especially for persons like me who was as a student neither employed in a company nor study at a public university. With this in mind would I have gone to eat or buy something had paid a huge amount of my saving money. However, as I mentioned before, having regard to consulting with my mother opening a new window to me, I informed government did not use to get money from tourists for visiting historical zones, on the grounds that pave the way for tourists industry to boom. Conspicuously, by doing so, I both completed my thesis and graduated from university with a brilliant score as well as was accepted on postgraduate. This example manifest that
On the whole, by pursuing the paragraph above, logically one can infer how historical buildings shed light on the way of a tourist to identify a city in a short time. For the sake of brevity, I should express, not only reflect ancient structures the identity of a city, is a time-saving and cost-effective choice as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 546, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ow to me, I informed government did not use to get money from tourists for visiting...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, as for, such as, as a result, as well as, by the way, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91812865497 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95694988495 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551656920078 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 801.0 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1970066192 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.15 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.65 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204625541635 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633229836152 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611155785088 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137211840666 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037001163311 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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