Imagine you are preparing for a trip. You plan to be away from your home for a year. In addition to clothing and personal care items, you can take one additional thing. What would you take and why?
I like discovering new cultures and people, so traveling the world is a possibility for me. If I were to go one year away from my home, I would definitely choose to take my phone. This is due to the fact that it is a convenient way to keep in touch with my family and friends, and because it is multi-functional. I will explain my statement in the following essay.
First and foremost, my family is the most significant thing in the world, because they have always supported and encouraged me to follow my dreams. That's way it is compulsory to talk with them as often as possible. Moreover, my social life is quite substantial and I have many acquaintances, so whenever I need to communicate with close friends social media is a great solution. It is not easy for an individual to find himself alone in an estrange place, therefore communicating with familiar people is of paramount importance. My experience is a compelling example. Back in college, I received a scholarship in Turkey for six months, and I was the only Romanian in that environment. Everything was different from what I prior knew, so it was a shock for me to embrace the new. Fortunately, I was able to speak with my family and fellows on the Internet, and thus they comfort and sustained me. This is why telecommunication is somehow vital.
To continue with, due to advent of the Internet and technology, mobile phones can be used for various activities such as searching for information, finding locations, restaurants, museums, verifying schedules, routes and so forth, which is handful when one is on a new territory. Furthermore, sometimes I can get bored and I might not be in the mood for going outside. Instead, I can stay indoors and watch movies, news or other entertainment shows. For instance, while living in Ankara, it helped me to move through the city. Most of Turkish cannot speak English and I did not know Turkish, so I had to rely on my phone in order to find touristic places, or just to wonder around. In other words, it made my life easier.
To summarize, my mobile phone comes wherever I go. This is because it is the most efficient method to speak with my relatives and friends, and because it offers numerous advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... and encouraged me to follow my dreams. Thats way it is compulsory to talk with them ...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... an individual to find himself alone in an estrange place, therefore communicating with fam...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6905370844 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97979538544 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56010230179 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9540727643 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3333333333 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.619047619 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109820701312 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0330464547202 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446408103067 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0671419068099 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434740100295 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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