Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need
There are some moot points about which type of charitable organization is the best for donating money. The question of this action has aroused as a subject of controversy among people. When it comes to my position I strongly subscribe to the point that the organization which gives money to people to start a small business is the best choice. I have some reasons the most outstanding of which will be explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that money has a pivotal role in people's life. Needless to say without money we can not do anything, therefore, the livelihood of people depends on money. If someone can provide money consequently, he or she will not need to charity. As a result, an organization which helps people to embark a small business leads to needful people gain money in an accurate way. As a case in the point, I vividly remember when I was a student at a university, I established an organization which helps other students to find a career very straightforward. Due to the high tuition fee and other expense students need a good job to afford their costs. All needful students joined our corporations and the corollary of this action was students did not need to charity because they could provide their price, owing to their jobs. My personal example competently corroborates to the point that it is better to select an organization which helps people to starts a small business.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned here is that when an organization help people to begin a business, they can hire another needful people in that business and this cycle continues and lead to many job opportunity for another person who needs a job. Hence, individuals can give their expenditures such as food and house and .etc. my personal experience demonstrates this reality, I am a civil engineer and work in the construction field. My friend and I set up a corporation which is related to this field. Instead of helping to charity we have decided to delegate some part of our work to a small group of a worker who needs to job. Thus, we hired some worker for that section which we need to accomplish. This action helps these kinds of people to not only find a job but also employ another worker. My personal experience shed some light to the point that it is better to learn fishery to hungry people instead of taking a fish for them.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate that it is very beneficial for needful people to offer a small business for them. Because this business helps them to provide their expense.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, such as, as a result, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71895424837 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75906465335 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477124183007 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.066693508 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4545454545 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266260620022 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846241313369 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624111076394 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162041093247 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067010636212 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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