If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
There are some moot points about changing one significant thing in our hometown. The question of which action is most important has aroused as a subject of controversy among people. When it comes to my position, by weighing up the pros and the cons, I strongly subscribe to the point that the most important thing which I would like to change is solving traffic difficulties. I have some reasons. The most outstanding of which will be explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that I live in Tehran where is the capital of our country. There is chronic traffic difficulty in this city which I like to change that. One of the negative aspects of this traffic is air pollution. This issue makes various diseases for our people, therefore, it is very important to modify the traffic issue. As a case to the point, I vividly remember when I was a high school student, the rate of air pollution and harmful material in our city environment led to close schools for one week. Thus, these vacations had a negative impact on our education. Furthermore, some classmates got a bad illness due to this pollution. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that changing traffic arduous is very crucial.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned here is that traffic wasting our time very much. Every day many people waste much time in traffic and miss many things owing to this difficulty. My personal experience demonstrates this reality when I was a student at the university, I had a thesis defense meeting. As a consequence, I was prepared for this important meeting but the heavy traffic led to I missed half an hour of my time and degraded my score. My personal example shed some light on the point that traffic makes many difficulties for us.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate that, if I could change something In my hometown I would change the traffic difficulties. This action not only ameliorates our environment but also, help us to be on time and do not waste our time.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79224376731 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81469887438 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515235457064 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6675238981 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.05 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135800149015 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047083167366 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636146551242 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999120508456 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490253747407 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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