People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are some moot points about the reasons which people attend university and college. The question of why people continue their education after school has aroused as a subject of controversy among academicians. When it comes to my position, by weighing up the pros and the cons, I strongly subscribe to the point that people attend college and university for having more job opportunities and social personality. I have some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that nowadays due to the hectic economic situation, there are not sufficient job opportunity for everyone. To be more specific, for each position there are many volunteers, therefore, employers consider various aspects for taking an employee. One of the significant aspects of employers is university educations. Thus people try to attend university and take their certifications for this action. As a case to the point, I vividly remember, when I was a student at high school, I was eager to find a sinecure job for my future. As a consequence, I choose civil engineering field because I heard that this field of study had a great job opportunity among other engineering fields. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that one of the most important reasons for attending university is future career and job positions.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned here is that in my country, Iran, university educations bring social personality. Moreover, individuals with university degrees have more respect than someone who has not academic educations. My personal example demonstrates this reality. I have a master of science degree in Geotechnical engineering and work in the corporation. I have many colleagues who have various degrees from various fields of study. My close counterpart in this corporation has a bachelor science degree in mechanical engineering. Although he has more work records than me but, owing to the difference in our degree, I take more wage rather than him. Hence master degree boosts my salary. My personal example shed some light to the point that university degree increase people social and active personality.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate that, people attend university for many reasons. From my perspective, they not only do this action for finding more job opportunities but also, for increasing their social personality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29722921914 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06336170135 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521410579345 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5102189933 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5909090909 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0454545455 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283443741042 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863526303009 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081478532838 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195573720463 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601135502861 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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