Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to
only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need
We are living in a sophisticated age which donating some money to charities are able to solve the poor people’s problem easily. I am certain that money could make people lives more successful, delightful and exiting. Some people believe that people should give money to organizations such as medical care and food and housing to people in need. However, others are convinced that people should donate money to people starting their own small business. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, I think the latter idea is more crucial and vital than others. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, job is the most important part of people life. If people have a decent job, they are able to experiences better and healthy life in other aspects of life. To illustrate this fact, one only needs to refer to the people having decent job usually are not sick and eat better food. Therefore, Seldom do people have a great job have problem in others aspects of life. I am certain that what is result from providing an opportunity for people to start their own business is to enhance their live and bring them several lucrative consequences such as healthy life style. Although medical care and food are important, if people have a great job they are able to make their life healthier and provide for themselves a great home. The noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that the high percentage of people having great job, are ones who have better life because their jobs guarantee their success.
The second reason why I agree with it is that most of big company and factory have started their business with a small business. As a matter of fact, if this organization help the small business, they able to expand their business and hire more people. Nowadays, so important are the most small company that all government donate a hoard of money to them to expand their business because expansion of this business are able to solve some part of unempolyeemnet of society. The modern world offers abundant example of people who are now wealth and prosperous started their job with a small business. Consequently, if I were to be a determiner in our society, I would have consume a large amount of money for establishing of small business because they will be successful in the near future. In addition to aforementioned notes, there is a well-known proverb in Persian, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this” the more charity donate money to the small business, the less society have problems. The proverb clarifies the fact that charities should look for a permanent solution instead of transient solution.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effect of donating some money to start of small business. Not do only they are able to experience better life thank to having decent job, but also they could solve the problems of society by expanding of their business. For this reason, I highly recommended that charities spend more money on starting new business.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 671, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'consumed'.
Suggestion: consumed
...determiner in our society, I would have consume a large amount of money for establishin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, well, i think, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2595.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89622641509 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61400845979 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449056603774 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8573473744 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.826086957 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0434782609 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210346043536 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761033892301 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640588127486 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144213260529 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726672624007 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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