Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
In today’s hectic world, many countries, especially those categorized among third-world ones, are dealing with a great variety of social problems. Owing to various causes such as severe economic conditions, many charities require money. If people voluntarily provide partial funds, charities will be able to salve a part of social difficulties via different means including providing housing and medical care to the poor and establishing small businesses among individuals. If I were given the opportunity to donate money to charity to help people in need, I would definitely fund an organization that prepares food and housing to the poor. I cling to this viewpoint for two main reasons which will be explored in the following.
To begin with, providing food and housing to people in need reduces the crime rate within societies. It is established beyond doubt that a large number of homeless people, which can be found in almost all countries, are more likely to commit crimes to grab food or temporary shelter to settle. For example, they might steal food from markets, get involved in extortion to obtain money for food or invade a house in large groups to live in. An example of my hometown clearly illustrates this concept. I live in a third-world country in which there are many cities with poor citizens. Last winter, I read in newspapers that the Police had arrested a group of homeless individuals. With the intention of finding a shelter to escape the cold, they had seized an abandoned household illegally. Moreover, they even had clung to intimidation through extortion to plunder a number of nearby markets in search of food. In their confiscations, they had mentioned food insecurity and having no permanent place to escape the winter as the leading causes of their crimes. This example clearly demonstrates how helping these people with their food security and dwellings will decrease the crime rate.
Furthermore, providing the poor with nutritious diets will lead to a healthier society. Without any shadows of doubt, poor people are prone to adverse health conditions since they do not receive sufficient amounts of nutritive material in their food. As a result, a vast number of these individuals suffer from fatal diseases owing to lack of appropriate immunity. Moreover, they are more likely to pass away in childhood or their prime of youth because of severe health conditions. This traumatic phenomenon is pronounced in long colonized, third-world countries. I recently read a report about Uganda, an impoverished African country. The report stated that as many as five thousand individuals including men, women and, most sadly, children have perished in this country during the past two years due to a shortage of nutritious food. The report also explained that some borderless, non-profit organizations had run a campaign to attract donations from people all around the world so as to increase the amount of healthy food available to the inferior society of this country. According to this report, many people are eager to donate money to help prevent such dramatic scenes.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned concepts into consideration, I firmly believe that donating money to organizations which provide food and housing to the poor is the best choice. This is because it will not only reduce the crime rate among poor and homeless people but also indeed improve the health conditions among the citizens of a poor country by providing nutritious diets for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 137, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...es. It is established beyond doubt that a large number of homeless people, which can be found in ...
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Line 3, column 984, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ations from people all around the world so as to increase the amount of healthy food ava...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, third, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2943.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18133802817 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82815040448 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 299.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526408450704 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 918.0 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.957416379 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.192307692 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8461538462 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80769230769 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101110827482 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.031553070528 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462979060162 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0750210197396 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325645131811 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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