Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need.
(The Preference type, three sides of the issue should be discussed)
These days, there are many different kinds of charitable organization each of which has special working realms like providing basic demands of people such as food and accommodate, health caring with providing medicine for patients, and supporting financial aspects in the start of enterprisers' activities. All of these charities are valuable, and no one in their right mind can question such a participation. I would choose charitable organization which build up money for the sake of starting others small business, were I to support a charity. I have a bunch of reasons for my own choice the most important of which are as follows: it is more profitable for both society and supported people.
In first place, every person has a goal for his or her participation in every activity and the charitable ones are no exception. As far as I am concern, I must say that the most important goal of mine to engage to these kinds of acts is making the world a better place to live. A Persian proverb says that the second important home of human beings is their society. By keeping this proverb in my mind, I think we should pay attention to our societies to reach the above-mentioned object. Societies now are plagued with violence, different kinds of crime, mischief, to name but a few all of which have their main roots in poverty and above it jobless youth, which are energetic and creative but have not been responded their fundamental required to start a work. If we support such an individual to have her or his own job, in fact we use their energy and creativity in a good way with which a society would be more tranquil and serene for all society dwellers. In addition, these supported people can bring a good chance for others to find a proper job, following decrease of unemployment in communities.
Secondly, I always subscribe to involvements that have long-term effects more than temporary ones. I cannot say that participating into charitable organizations like those provide people with food and commodities is imprecise, but they have temporary influences, so they are my last choices. They act like a sedative drug for pain by which our pain maybe vanishes for hours, but after a while it will back if we don’t treat it deeply. By seeing these mentioned consideration, I put the latter charitable organization, which allocate collected money to enterprisers, into permanent treatments. It gives people a great chance to change their financial future, so whenever they get sick and like this they will not in demands of others. Fundamentally speaking, people with the chance of having job can fulfill their requirements like preparing accommodate and food by their own selves. It is crystal clear that this approach acts such airtight inasmuch as people can guarantee future financial aspects and following comfort for next generation with the huge flood of job positions.
In summary, with all this taken to account, I do donate money to charitable organization which gives money to people that want to start a new business on the ground that both society and helped people can be given more permanent benefits. Who can deny the enjoyment and calm arise from having a decent job? Or is there anyone who cannot see the disappearing of unhealthy community by using the power of youth in proper way like in a new business?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
These days, there are many different kinds of charitable organization each o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, i think, in addition, in fact, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2783.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 566.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91696113074 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84199182867 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501766784452 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 876.6 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.5280272815 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.523809524 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9523809524 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180482116362 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548847663777 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578835475202 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125547042269 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392735472843 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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