It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your
For parents, choosing where to raise their children is of a crucial imprtance, since this decision is a determining factor in their children’s future. There have been many debates about whether to bring up children in an urban or a rural environment. As far as I am concerned, children would be better off grwiong up in an urban city, and such a belief is based on the reasons elaborated on below:
First of all, I think it helps the growing children to pursue their dreams. Particularly, when it comes to improving knowledge of the world around and the new scientific accomplishments, cities provide the young children with the necessities to reach highest level of wisdom. Many well-known and high ranked univirsities are built in big cities, and growing up in these environments encourages children to study there. Many people think that the unstoppable growing in the population of the cities are causing distractions and people can not reach inner peace, hence they might not be able to concentrate with the same quality as they can focus in rural areas. However, I think that it would be fair to say that those who grow up in particularly big and developed cities, learn how to adapt themselves to all the crowds and focus on their purposes. By a way of example, my cousin and were living in a countryside in the same neighborhood. After some years the moved out to the capital of Iran. Ever since she entered highschool, she decided to pursue her university education in engineering in a very high ranked university she passed by every day. I believe that because of the environment that she lived in, my cousin is a successful engineer now and owns a large campany.
In addition to the beneficial effects of growing up in a city on chilldren’s knowledge improvements, I believe it is helps children to interact with different types of people more efficiently. People in big cities, especially in metropolises have better opportunities to meet others from a vriety of different cultures. Hence, the children growing up in these environments will manage to gain the abilities to communicate easily , and they have better chances of success. For example my friend who grew up in New york has many friends from different parts of the world. Because of her communicative skills, she gets along with almost all the people from different cultural or religious backgrounds. Although she is much younger than me with no job experiences, thanks to her strong connections, she receives many job offers daily.
In conclusion, and on the basis of the aforementioned agreements, I would like to reiterate that I believe that raising children in a big city is very beneficial. I feel this because, It will help children to pursue their dreams, and because children grow to become more communicative
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, so, well, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2335.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94703389831 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02070881814 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512711864407 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2624693081 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.894736842 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8421052632 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212857180577 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631189854741 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493363048357 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132018396619 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0223658643556 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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