It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
Everyone is willing to succeed rather than fail. However, there is a normal phenomenon that people usually cannot make achievements even though being exhausted. Under this circumstance, it is commonly believed that keeping happy and optimistic when we fail is more important than success in life. Personally, I am in favor of this view because I believe that the ability to remain happy and optimistic in the period of failure contributes to both mental health and success itself. I will prove my view in the subsequent paragraphs.
What should be prioritized is that mental health is crucial for us, people living in a stressful society. We need to compete with all kinds of people in various situations to get what we want, which loads considerable stress on our shoulders. Therefore, it is important to keep a healthy mind since it will prevent us from being depressed and even hurting ourselves, helping us through those tough time. Moreover, life doesn't only contain success or failure. There are many wonderful places to travel and many exciting things to experiene and a good mental health is the prerequisite for enjoying a wonderful life, which is more important than success in some ways.
What should be mentioned also is that remaining optimistic actually can help us succeed. To begin with, there is a saying that failure is the mother of success. In detail, You are capable of learning from failure unless you can keep optimistic when failing. Otherwise, your negative emotion is likely to control you and trap you in it, wasting your time and opportunities. There are many times when I discover another method to tackle a problem just after failing at the latest try. I cannot find those solutions without an optimistic attitude to failure. Besides, your optimism can infect your colleagues and push your team to succeed. It is obvious that we are going to be happier among a group of people talking about things from an optimistic aspect rather than always holding negative views. It is the positive atmosphere that helps a group move forward, overcoming obstacles again and again.
To conclude, I believe that it is more important for us to remain happy and optimistic when we fail than to succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...hrough those tough time. Moreover, life doesnt only contain success or failure. There ...
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Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...eep optimistic when failing. Otherwise, your negative emotion is likely to control y...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99193548387 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66600944685 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4550055942 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.85 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346517747383 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979583210247 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124532703474 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253301752005 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107604565454 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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