It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours
There are many people who believe that working in short hours for five days in a week could give them the opportunity to have more time in a week to spend for their hobbies such as going out with friends, watching TV and reading their favorite books. On the other hand, I believe that working in the long hours job for three days sequential could keep you more concentrate on your job and give you more time to entertain.
First of all, what makes people so encourage to take full-time jobs for just three days of the week is increasing the percentage of concentration in their career. As a matter of fact, working for a long time and 3 days in sequence could give the opportunity to the employees to focus on their careers and responsibilities. For this reason, the employees manage their program and their schedule to do their responsibilities for just 3 days of the week and avoid the distractions might lower their concentration. However, the people and employees who have to work five days of week part time could not manage their time easily and might distract easier than the people who work for three hours in a week with full concentration. The latest research examination on the California states represents that the companies that have employees who have to work long hours for just three days in the week make more benefits than other companies that have employees with the regular schedule. The scientists believe that these higher benefits are the significant consequences of the high-level of employees concentration on their career. Thus, working for three days a week could have more advantages than working five days a week.
In addition, one of the remarkable advantages of working long hours for three days in the week is having more time to spend on entertainment. These people have the chance to make several plans for the rest of their week and enjoy most of their time to spend on going on vacations, hanging with friends and playing sports. For instance, I remember when I was in college in abroad, I had a chance to work as a research assistant for one of my professor's project. She made me work long hours for three days a week. Therefore, the rest of the week I had the chance to visit many fantastic and historical monuments of the city. In contrast, if I had to work for five days of the week I did not have much time sightseeing and enjoy my time there.
In conclusion, according to all above mentioned, it is crystal clear that taking the career that makes you work for long hours for three days have more benefits than the jobs you have to work for five days of the week. Because the jobs that you have to work all week can reduce your concentration on your responsibility, also you have to spend all of your time to do your tasks instead of enjoying your time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 581, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...yees who have to work five days of week part time could not manage their time easily and ...
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Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
...k and enjoy most of their time to spend on going on vacations, hanging with friends and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in short, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65083835795 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.358 0.524837075471 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6000776244 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.882352941 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4117647059 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1764705882 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.577639944687 0.236089414692 245% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.263356792763 0.076458572812 344% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165858660941 0.0737576698707 225% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.443691125231 0.150856017488 294% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384017450743 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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