it is more important for student to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts.
Nowadays, the educational system plays a substantial role in our lives. Therefore, there is a hot debate about whether it is better that students learn the materials overally and superficially or students have to spend much time to learning of ideas and concepts. However, I personally subscribe to the view that it is more advantageous to students should provide conditions which can interpret every vital concept easily mainly because the main purpose of every education in diverse countries, creating an appropriate situation for student to perceive worthwhile ideas and deep understanding of everything give a considerable confident to people. In-depth discussion on each of the abovementioned reasons is presented below.
First and possibly the most important reason why I believe that providing a suitable educational environment for students is the main goal of the educational system of every country because this advantage increases student’s chance in finding an appropriate job in the future. To be more specific, this real insight help student to have an effective perception of their interests. According to a recent survey by Time magazine, students who are able to learn school’s courses to their classmates effectively, these students usually will have a prosperous future. My own experience is also a compelling example of this. My classmate was known as the second teacher because he has an incredible talent in the real interpretation of the school’s homework in the high school period and this ability encouraged him to become a thriving researcher in the university. For this reason, I strongly believe that superficial learning can’t be useful for students.
There is a further more subtle word we must consider, which is the fact that a deep perception of subjects gives complete confidence to students and this trait has a positive influence in the personality of students due to these students have high-level of discipline in doing of their works. For instance, my cousin had similar circumstances in their schools and this condition encourage him to does not feel weakness in facing huge problems. Accordingly, I think that accurate perception has very benefits on the personality of people.
In a word, by taking all the aforementioned reasons into account we may draw the conclusion that it is more indispensable for the student to perceive concepts thoroughly. This is primarily due to the facts that this state is the main purpose of the educational system of every country and this insight give unmeasurable confidence to people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Nowadays, the educational system plays a substantial role in our lives. Therefore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2180.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35626535627 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1595121855 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.9434608877 48.9658058833 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.333333333 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1333333333 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257508743963 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827234923067 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0791911407306 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162183417709 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506931167463 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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