It is often not a good thing for people to move to a new town or country because they lose their old friends.
Nowadays, to a large extent, we cannot determine where we live if we want to seek better careers. Job opportunies and works distributed by our boss often require us to move to a new city even a new country. Some people hold a negative view about the movement and don't regard it as a good thing because they consider that old friends may be lost after they move to another city or country. However, personally, I belive that friends won't be lost due to where you live, so moving to a new town or country is not always a bad thing.
What should be prioritized is that you won't lose your friends due to the physical distance between you and your friend due to the developed internet. It is known that the instant message applications' functions today are so powerful that we can chat with our friends whenever we want. Many emojis are invented to help you express your emotions and you can take images and send voices messages to your friends to share everything interesting with them. Moreover, you can make video chats with them when you stuck into some troubles. All in all, there are too many techniques that can help you communicate with your friends. So, don't worry the physical distance will break you up.
After explaining why you won't lose your friends due to the physical distance between you, I want to explore the reasons why moving to a new place is not a bad thing. To begin with, it will enlarge your social circle which benefits your career. It is obvious that you will get in touch with new people after entering a new place. New colleagues and neighbors are all potential candidates for your new friends. They will promote you to get accustomed to the new environment as well as show you around the new city. When I enterred the university standing on a city where I hadn't been before, my roommates helped me to clean up my positions, prepare for the new life. Moreover, they lead me to the most flourishing walking street of the city, tasting local snacks. Only with their earnest help can I become accustomed to the life in the university so they become my new friends. At the same time, I haven't lost contact with my best friend, my deskmate in my high school. We often chat with wechat, sharing our courses and projects, which empowers us to fight as before. Moreover, new places means new opportunities. There is a trend in China to move to metropolitans like Beijing and Shanghai because those cities have the most sufficient occupations from all walks of life. People have more opportunities to achieve their dreams when they work there, working with the most excellent people of the country. Therefore, moving to a new place is not always a bad thing.
To sum up, I belive that you won't lose your friends due to the physical distance between you and it is worthy of moving to achieve your goal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58498023715 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46901781952 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48023715415 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0665131891 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.24 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300686988034 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854269419034 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736803074024 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183469054392 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118994343339 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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