One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Many people think it is a good idea for children to take a part time job. While some of them believe that parents should not force their kids to work at this age, I hold the opposite view. I think parents should encourage their teens to work in order to let them be ready for adult life.
To begin with, when parents allow their teens to take a part-time job, teens will learn how to be independent. They will earn some money from this work and have their own budget. Therefore, they can manage their budget by their own without asking their parents. My own experience is a compelling example for this. When I was in intermediate school, I used to work at the grocery store next to my home after school for four hours. At the end of the month, the store manager used to give me a salary. After I receive my salary from him, I used to save half of it in my money saver box, and I used to buy some clothes and shoes to myself by the other half. My father was very proud at me because I did not ask him for money at all after I started to work in the grocery store. Then, when I went to the university and lived in the dormitory, it was easy for me to manage my monthly balance because I learned that when I worked in the grocery store. Indeed, when parents enable their kids to take a part-time job, these kids will learn how to be independent by managing their budget.
Adding to the previous point, when parents encourage their teens to take a part-time job, kids will improve many skills in their personalities. They can learn how to communicate with people properly. For example, when my nephew worked in a small library in his neighborhood, he was able to speak with elderly in the front disk, so he knew how to respect them by saying some respectful words such as Sir or Please. Also, he improved his listening skills by allowing people to talk most of the time and he listened to them. Now, my nephew is studying at the university, and he is perfect communicating with professors and other people.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that parents have to encourage their kids to take a part-time job. This is will improve many skills in their personality, and it allows them to be independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...t is a good idea for children to take a part time job. While some of them believe that pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36829268293 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41798363399 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448780487805 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2062176191 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.55 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252950997033 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945208284286 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078899734081 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193577228458 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564373308863 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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