In order to stay healthy, many people choose to exercise. Some people tend to exercise individually such as running and riding bicycles, etc. Some people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. Which one do you prefer and why?
In our hectic life with the proliferation of fast foods and jobs without movements, being healthy is a vital issue of people's daily lives. To accomplish our tasks either personal or work-related ones we need to have a good physical and mental health. Some people do exercise to stay healthy. A question can be raised in this regard is that what type of activities help us more. One standpoint idea advises to practicing by yourself while, another perspective recommends to exercise/exercising in a group. I concur with the former idea and in the ensuing lines, I will delve into two reasons to substantiate my point.
The first reason is that group exercising is more interesting and appealing and help you to do exercise for a longer time. Human beings are a kind of social animal and they have a tendency to complete jobs in a group. On the contrary, people usually give up in the middle of things that they do individually. So, being a part of a group is a compelling motivation for you to continue your exercising. For example, my brother and I often went to the gym next to our home three days a week. In addition we went to a distant pool on weekends. After he got married, because his house is not near the gym he didn't come to the gym any more but still participates in the pool program. Owing to fact that I should go to the gym by myself, eventually, I gave up and I didn't go there too. But, as I can be with my brother in the pool, I continue to go there.
The second reason I want to elaborate on is that interacting with other people has a significant benefits. Not only can you build a network of various people but also you can learn useful things about sports and health issues. In a break time, people discuss about their careers and you can find some opportunities in this valuable moments. Also, you can talk with experienced ones with your health problems and then they teach you some movements to improve your health.
In summary, all aforementioned reasons bring us to conclude that excursing in a group is superior to do it alone as you have more stimulus to continue and more chances to expand both your network and your knowledge about healthy sports.
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...nd your knowledge about healthy sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, then, while, for example, in addition, in summary, kind of, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53924050633 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71924426573 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536708860759 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1178987166 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.65 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211588450468 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073643415374 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106088349079 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123466667783 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503537141399 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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