A parent wants to help his or her child become better at a skill such as playing a musical instrument or competing in a sport. Some people believe that the best way to do so is for the parent to require the child to practice every day for a set number of minutes or hours. Other people believe that it is best for the parent to encourage the child to practice only as much as the child wishes, with no requirement about the amount of time spent practicing. Which view do you agree with and why?
That a parent let their children to practice only when they want, will let them to live a happy life. Because as far as I'm concerned, parents will be happy when their children are succeeded, this happiness has to be mutually equal for both parents and children, for this life is the right of the children. Therefore, I strongly approve the idea in which children can practice as much as they wish. Finding their talent and growing them as an independent person are two reasons for my approval.
It can be said that, when a parent encourages their children to practice as much as the children want, they unconsciously will let them to choose what they love and as a result improve their talent in the way in which children want. Although a child would rather to play games rather than practicing, by being optimistic and teaching them life-turning lessons as much as their understanding, their games will alter to practices in which they are talented. In addition, parents tend to prevent of wasting costs which can be spent on finding children's talent. For example, my parents had experienced this situation when they forced me to play Tar while I've loved Piano whole my life. I've spent 16 years playing Tar and I had nothing to say about it but when I finally stop playing Tar and switched it to Piano, over six months, I had a concert in my town. It was better for my parents to spend in Piano rather than Tar. On the other hand, when parents requires children to practice every day in specific times not only they may hate the practices which are forced to, but if they see a friend's of them in the future who achieved what he/she wants because there was no force on him/her, they will be depressed in their future life.
The other reason is that, by encouraging children, they learn how to be independent. If parents teach their children how to think rather than teach them how they have to think at the same time as they are letting the children to practice as much as they want, it will capable them to make their life important decisions in an excellent way. Besides, as the children get older, inasmuch as they have trusted their parents—because they have experienced that their parents respect what their children want—they probably give their parents advices as a new idea as well as count on them. In contrast, when children are forced by their parents, they will have problems in the future as well. For example, they will grow up such a man who always has to be told what to do rather than he himself thinks that what he should do. Let's imagine parents who cannot make a decision themselves, what a disaster it can be!
As a conclusion, in my viewpoint it's better for parents to encourage their children rather than enforce them. Two reasons have mentioned above; first, children will be let to find their talents and second, it will let them to become independent. If parents do so, I think the world will be incarnation of heaven in which everyone does everything he/she wants without eating any ones right.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in contrast, as a result, as well as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2495.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62894248609 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49458850983 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437847866419 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4861229044 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.315789474 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3684210526 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.68421052632 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165553835251 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688573352807 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404068655843 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123706993954 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0223391276298 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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