Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Some people think that parents nowadays are more helpful to their children than parent in the past. People think that because the advance in technology, today’s parent become more knowledgeable and helpful for their children. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that parent in the past are more helpful to their children. The basis of my opinion is educational and social.
From the educational perspective, parents consider to be the most important rule to their children. Parents pass on value to their children. Parents were the best model rule to their children. They were the most valued source of education. The education was only enclosed between school and home. Parent in the past were able to help their children in homework and all their school work. On the other hand, nowadays there are many other sources of education in which children can rely on. For instance, with the advancement in technology all students have access to internet. Each student has his own laptop. Students today are in no need to their parent help. All students can surf the internet and get information and help through their computers. That is why I consider parent in the past were more involved in their children’s education.
Socially, the social lives of moms in the past allowed them to be more involved in their children education. In the past moms had more time to spend with their children and involved in their education process. For instance, I can remember when I was child in primary school, after coming back from school my mom was always at home waiting for us. She prepared a healthy meal. She stared to study and helps us to understand the curriculum better. All her attentions and care are managed toward us. However, today’s moms are really busy. They are working or studying for an advanced degree to get a better job. Moms today’s are not involved in their children education as before. The school and the technology are the best sources of information to lead children in their education. In the past the social life style was really accommodated for all parents to help their children educationally.
In conclusion for the reasons I mentioned above, I completely agree that parents in the past were more involved in their children education than parent today’s. Nowadays technology and advancement prohibit many parents from helping their children. Parents today are really busy to consume their time to help children in their education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, so, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06937799043 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70339268289 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423444976077 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5851095727 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.3548387097 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4838709677 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29032258065 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.625672009104 0.236089414692 265% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205532939894 0.076458572812 269% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.190126209817 0.0737576698707 258% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.504269319039 0.150856017488 334% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113237583167 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.53 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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