People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do

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People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do—rather than doing things they should do.

Nowadays, there are people who spend more time doing things that they enjoy instead to do that they should do. However, other people do not have time to spent in enjoyable activities for several reasons such as they are working, taking care their family, or making money. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that public are too busy and concern doing their matters than spending time in they would like to do.
First of all, in order to survive in the modern world, people have to spend more time working than enjoying life. Furthermore, in the past people worked fewer hours than today and they had more time to do other things. Unfortunately, this scenario is not possible in the present. People work around twelve or more hours a day, and indeed they work more days. It is impossible think that people could have time to spend in other things instead working.
Second, after work people must take care family. There are many things that remain to do at home such as shopping, house cleaning and taking care children. It clear that this claim has been influenced by my own experience. For example, I work six-day a week and twelve hours a day as a veterinarian, but the day is not finish at all after work. Since my wife work many hours a day as well, it is my responsibility not only pick children up from school but also I go to do shopping. Obviously, after all that’s responsibilities I finish so tired, and I do not want to do anything more.
Finally, the cost of life has increased in the last years. Thus, people think more how pay bills instead to think in enjoy life. More specifically, people are so much stressful, and they do not feel with energy to do anything else during the day or in the night. For instance, I have my daughter who finished her degree, and she began to work as a doctor, but her wage is not enough for pay her all bills. She is more concern how she could pay her expenses in the future than how she can do something that she can enjoy.
In conclusion, for all of reasons that I have mentioned above, I believe that people spend more time doing their duties than doing something enjoyable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, well, after all, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49230769231 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3948443418 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469230769231 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6517993379 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462030938069 0.236089414692 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158331442559 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16738848986 0.0737576698707 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303162641112 0.150856017488 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166336840248 0.0645574589148 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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