People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Today, people should acquire and apply essential skills and abilitires in order to attain success. There seems to be a little agreement about whether people spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things or doing their responsibilites. From my point of view, today people spend most of their time on doing their tasks and responsibilities in the best possible way. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
From a social perspective, today, parents spend most of their time on working hard to satisfy the material needs of their children, to the point that they have not enough time to spend with their children and enjoy palying with them. On the other hand, it is difficult to meet the material and non-material needs of their children unless parents decrease their own lisure time only for the sake of their children. Besides, children having not enough abilities to interact with others and standing on their own feet may face a huge number of social and economic problems at the later stages of their lives, which is rooted in the lack of communication skills should be obtained by interaction with parents. Therefore, it is not only essential for people to have a good relationship with their children but also important to spend more time with them, leading to children's self-confidence, self-respect and self-satisfaction in the course of time. This trend is naturally followed by a decrease in allocating time for parents on the other aspects of life such as having a vacation, holding a party and taking a trip.
On the ecconomic side, people's material needs are met only by making more money and profit,so it is crystal clearly that people should spend more time on doing business and generating money. Moreover, today's world is very competitive and increasing income is more difficult than in the past. For teh purpose of illustration, consider the amount of time and effort should be spent on building a company and developing one factory. It needs a gread deal of endevour to get essential certificates such as environmental certificate to build a factory in comparison to the past. As a result, today, in order to achieve success people should carry out their responsibilities in the besst possible way to land a decent job and develop in their lives.
To sum up, I hold the view that today people spend most of tehir time on fulfilling teh material and non-material needs of tehir family, which sets the stage for doing their tasks and duties far better than ever.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , so
...met only by making more money and profit,so it is crystal clearly that people shoul...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... tasks and duties far better than ever.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95734597156 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85466646733 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497630331754 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0253279874 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.466666667 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1333333333 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262291860173 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984667343725 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119798387361 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196044998646 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118634433921 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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