People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
Nowadays, more and more people are looking for a better way to live their life with success and the greatest achievement. There will be an argument between a person who emphasizes skill and the one who is trying to get the various skills. I personally believe that people who possess a variety of skills can achieve the best things for two reasons.
First of all, the world has changed so rapid with modern technology and everyone has to follow the upgrade data and system. At that time, the language may require to communicate with people around the world and English will become the global language in the world. As a result, the one who wants to catch up with the latest things, they have to learn English as an essential need. Drawing from my experience, I graduated from a South-East Asian country, and we used mostly our traditional language in the classroom and I realized that only with our field subject, I could not extend my knowledge . Consequently, I need to learn English to study advanced techniques and to explore the data that is related to my career. As a result, I have a chance to connect with the others who are working in the same field.
Secondly, most people always find new and different tools for life and happiness. Concentration on one skill can affect not only your development but also your motivation.Therefore, people ought to try to get good habits for exercising like swimming , running and cycling , which may lead to obtain good health and experiences. Unless people have good health, they cannot access achievement and better outcomes in their future . Some research expresses that a person who is doing such other activities is more successful in their life.
In conclusion, there are numerous reason to distinct my points of view. Based on the reasons mentioned above, the people who have expertise in various skills can be more successful than people who concentrate on one productive skill.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87537993921 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73817561778 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565349544073 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2463932528 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.933333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401741823129 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122553118057 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12741831112 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278931538314 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128083896941 0.0645574589148 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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