People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons.
Most of people, as a result of working, they get money. However, money sometimes is not the main goal of working. Some people are looking for other purposes such as challenging, enjoying, and health. I will develop these areas in the following paragraphs.
First of all, money is vital to people, but challenging is necessary also. People need to feel challenging not only for archiving goals but also for lasting at work. Surely, not all people can do this because they do not have the opportunity to choose the job. However, if they have an alternative, I will advice them to choose a work where they find some challenges. Otherwise, in a while, they could feel frustrated and leave the job.
Second, working should be enjoyable. In other word, people who are under a stressful job, they do not going to stay for long. Of course, all people at the same point are under stress when they are working, but it should be a balance between each other. For instance, I am working as a veterinarian, and I have to admit when there is a new case, and I do not know how to treat it, I start to feel super nervous, but at the same time, I enjoy the pressure to figure out the problem.
Finally, nobody can deny that keeping work is synonymous of health. People who are not working, they can get sick. Several researches suppport this statement. Those papers claim that people who are not working, they could change their metabolism. Drawing my own experience, a few years ago, I lost my job, and I could not find other for a while. During this period, I gain more weight than I am regularly. As a result, in the following months, I had to work out so much to archive my old weight.
In conclusion, money is not the only reason for working. I am convinced that there are other reasons which people have, such as challenging, enjoying, and health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
Most of people, as a result of working, they get money...
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Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is sometimes
...working, they get money. However, money sometimes is not the main goal of working. Some peop...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ese areas in the following paragraphs. First of all, money is vital to people, ...
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Line 2, column 81, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...to people, but challenging is necessary also. People need to feel challenging not on...
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Line 2, column 317, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'advise' (a verb)?
Suggestion: advise
...er, if they have an alternative, I will advice them to choose a work where they find s...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld feel frustrated and leave the job. Second, working should be enjoyable. In ...
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Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...case, and I do not know how to treat it, I start to feel super nervous, but at th...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e pressure to figure out the problem. Finally, nobody can deny that keeping wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, of course, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54354354354 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54405226591 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510510510511 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1053884389 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.7727272727 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1363636364 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328132319443 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901715717471 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507602455322 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187151985127 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339340429972 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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