17 Your city or province has received a large donation or money to improve the education of children. It must choose between spending the money on improvement of early childhood education (for children ages 4 to 7) and spending the money on the improvement of education for older children (ages 11 to 14). Which do you think is the better option?
No one can deny that there are advantages and disadvantages to money donations. Specifically, when donations are for schools, and boards have a huge responsibility with the money. The question is where they invest the money. If I were to choose between early education or older education, I prefer to address the funds into the most initial levels, and I will develop those reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the initial school level is the future in communities. Furthermore, it is fundamentally important to have robust foundations in the first steps of education. In order to achieve this goal, I believe the best option is to work on younger children. For example, build a new classroom where students could have the latest technology, it should be a good investment for them.
A second area where students need more commodities is in the sports areas. Regardless, in most of the schools, there is a shield where students spend time working out, sometimes those places are not prepared for children. More specifically, I will try to develop a specific place where children can work out with the idea that those sport help them in the right development of their bodies. In other words, trying to avoid physical problems in the future.
Finally, children need to have access to do not only a full library but also need to have access to new educational software. According to modern governmental education, children require to use different online software in order to complete their educational programs. I think a good idea should be investing in the new computer classroom for children. Thus, they can finish with government guidance.
To sum up, for all those reasons I have mentioned above, I believe that the most critical age where should go the money of donations is in younger children.
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also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, thus, for example, i think, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00986842105 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84954063643 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546052631579 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.614560268 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5882352941 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8823529412 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203438579925 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614161262869 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500537709943 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119373362968 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604556374106 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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