Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world, with the ever-increasing rate of modernization, governments should allocate specified amount of budget on various scopes; having a better access to the internet and improving public transportation are not an exception. While some people believe that it is vital and essential for governments to invest on improving access to the Internet, others stand at the other side of the continuum, holding the opinion that improving public transportation is rather important and should be taken care of. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter group of people and consider that spending money on public transportation's improvement is more radical. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that the more advanced and improved the public transportation of a society is, the lower the air pollution will be, if government allocate enough budget to this section. To put it in other words, when government and policy makers take into account a considerable amount of budget to improve the public transportation, this measure will certainly contribute to a better environmental condition because improving public transportation like subways, trains, and buses which are an important part of a society's transportation means, can reduce the number of pollutants. An example can drive this notion home. I have read in a local newspaper about the newly established policy in New York which is a metropolitan city. According to the policy, the mayor of New York in a collaborative project with different states and regions, decided to allocate a large portion of finance to improving the quality of public transportation, hoping this change will lead to a more clean air to breathe. It was not surprising that after a period of six or seven months, the environmentalists reported a sharp decrease in the number of pollutant since more people wanted to used public transportation rather than their private cars.
Furthermore, public transportation is a necessity in a society because not all people can afford having private cars; as a result, government should spend enough allocation and budget to this part. To be more specific, with the economic recessions in many parts and countries all around the world, the use of public transportation has been increased dramatically. Not having private cars has led people to adhere to public transportation. To put it in a more vivid picture, Iranian government spend millions of dollars to renovate and improve public transportation because the majority of people are impoverished and do not have the money to buy private cars. Not only will this renovation benefit people who do not have cars of their own, but also it will encourage more and more of the public to take advantage of the improved and advanced car. Not to mention that this encouragement and enthusiastic of people to use public transportation reduced the pollutant as well. If the government did not invest on this part of the society, many people would be deprived of the convenience they have now.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that government should spend money and budget on public transportation rather than the Internet. Not only will the air pollution will be reduced, but also more and more people who cannot afford cars of their own, can take advantage of this change.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 677, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'transportations'' or 'transportation's'?
Suggestion: transportations'; transportation's
... consider that spending money on public transportations improvement is more radical. The reason...
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Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to have'.
Suggestion: to have
...ciety because not all people can afford having private cars; as a result, government s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 34.0 8.0752688172 421% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2917.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1811722913 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14546828052 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442273534636 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 926.1 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5525947221 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.526315789 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6315789474 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28499565395 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10285078644 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647404102906 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20263322781 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487136203223 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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