Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
It goes without saying that in this progressive world where we live, every individual has different ways to cope with his or her problems, among which enjoying in their jobs sounds to be one most conspicuous way. These days, there is a heated debate among people whether working five days in a regular hour or work just three days for long hours has a profound effect on the people in terms of their happiness during the job. Personally speaking, I firmly believe that it is essential for people to work just five days in regular hours to create an enjoyable time for themselves. To support my point of view, two significant reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that the reason which has made the people enjoyable with working five days in a normally time lies behind the fact that they have an extra time to spend on their families every day. In this line of thought, it should be noted that human beings from all corners of the globe are striving to allocate some time with their family to reduce their stress. To put it simply, if the father of the family spends some time after the work with members of the family, he will not run into a huge problem and will not be overwhelmed by stress. Therefore, working every day with regular time is a major factor to reduce the pressure since they can create a better moment with your family. So, working three days with long hours has not considerable influence on the relationship with other members of the family, and as a result, it is possible to increase the stress in that life.
What is more, it is no secret to anyone that if someone works five days instead of three days, he or she receives a hoard of money, which means ones have a hoard of money and as a result, the enjoyment comes in his or her life. To be more specific, it is believed by many people that in the last decade, people have been looking for new ways to increase their money. In this regard, the more ones work for more time, the more can save some money, and the more have a better time in life. It is worth bearing in mind that not only money creat a better moment for every individual but also it needs to work very hard to earn more money. To put it into a more vivid picture, having compared my sister with my younger brother, a huge gap can be noticed in their lifestyle concerning the impact and influence of earning money in their life. While my sister works in a private company in three days with receiving a little money at the end of the month and she also has stressed to pay her way in life since she cannot save money. In contrast, my brother do some works in the public company which sponsored by government and he also have a lot of money, so he always is happy and enjoy his time with his friend. The difference makes it clear that it is essential for people to work with more hours and save money.
Furthermore, working 3 days a week with longer hour can have a negative effect on both the costumers and client of the company and the person. Working fewer numbers of day means that the position might be empty and no other employer fill that position until the next week when the job starts. There are definitely some clients who want their jobs to be accomplished on a special day. As an illustration, I needed the signature of a vice-president of the company in order to get the patent of my project. Unfortunately, whenever I went to the company in order to visit the person in charge, the secretary would told me that he did not come to the firm today. When I asked the reason, I found out that he was working only one day from early in the morning till late in the night. When I came back on the specific day that the secretary assured me the principal would be his office, surprisingly I saw a long queue of people who had the same problem as I did. Therefore, working more days in a week provide clients and customers a more efficient way to deal with their problems.
In conclusion, given the reasons mentioned, I firmly hold the view that working with five days and more hours has a positive effect on the people. This is because they can some money and spend more time with their family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('normally') instead an adjective, or a noun ('time') instead of another adjective.
...ple enjoyable with working five days in a normally time lies behind the fact that they have an ...
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Line 5, column 1128, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ich sponsored by government and he also have a lot of money, so he always is happy a...
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Line 5, column 1155, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is always
... and he also have a lot of money, so he always is happy and enjoy his time with his frien...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o work with more hours and save money. Furthermore, working 3 days a week with ...
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Line 7, column 611, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'tell'
Suggestion: tell
...e person in charge, the secretary would told me that he did not come to the firm tod...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 117.0 52.1666666667 224% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3430.0 1977.66487455 173% => OK
No of words: 781.0 407.700716846 192% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39180537772 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.28643331793 4.48103885553 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32154844944 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 324.0 212.727598566 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414852752881 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1085.4 618.680645161 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.6150248912 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.037037037 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9259259259 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59259259259 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328060487486 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107234606765 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672152884681 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202119082275 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445291151929 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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