Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive world where we live, famous people have a profound effect on the people's view and opinion, which means that most people especially young people are inclined to be influenced by famous athletes either positively or even adversely. These days, there is a heated debate among individuals whether it is essential for famous people to have their private life or be in a community between people. Personally speaking, I firmly hold the opinion that famous entertainers do not always to have more privacy. To support my point of view, two significant reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that the reason which has made them famous people have less privacy in their life lies behind the fact that the more they increase communication between people they can create the opportunity for themselves to have more followers. In this line of thought, it should be noted that famous people are striving to make a great film or event for their followers, so they need to increase their connection between ordinary people. Through association with people who are meant for them, they achieve a sense of security, love, acceptance, and personal worth. However, not only relationship with people improve their talent and make better work for their followers, but also they can gain a lot of good characteristics in their private lives. Therefore, the connection between people plays an important role in their ability to create better work in the next task.
What is more, it is no secret to anyone that the famous people in our society are always like to compete with other celebrities, which means that if they deserve to have more privacy, they cannot improve their popularity. To be more specific, it is believed by many people that in the last decade, celebrities have been looking for ways to increase their money, so it is indisputable fact they should compete with other celebrities. By way of illustration, I have recently a piece of newspaper and the psychology section of it attracted me which was about the presence of famous people in the society and the relation between popularity with their presence in the community which accomplished by two groups of famous people. Astoundingly, the groups who like to have their private life, people do not know them and their popularity decreased among people.
In conclusion, given the reasons mentioned, I firmly believe that famous people do not always like to have a private life. This is because they always like to connect with people to have more followers and increase their popularity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...us people have a profound effect on the peoples view and opinion, which means that most...
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Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ollowers and increase their popularity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01822323462 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67697665182 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473804100228 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.5354669107 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.866666667 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2666666667 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229971184874 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106737753996 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666157357578 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177061475279 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032189230697 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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