Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive world where we live, networking website and new video gaming have a profound effect on children's learning either positively or even adversely. These days, there is a heated debate among people whether due to the new technology in this era, spending time doing schoolwork is difficult or not. Personally speaking, I firmly hold the view that online games and networking websites have a pivotal role in disturbing the children in the process of learning. To support my point of view, two significant reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that the reason which has made the children do not incline to spent most of their time in doing education lies behind the fact that not only playing video games is a sheer waste of time, but also most of the children like to play videogames instead of doing homework. In this line of thought, it should be noted that new technology is a significant factor which disturbs everyone, and it has a negative influence on children since they spent most of their time in doing videogames. Therefore, they incline to play more, and they lose their focus to do schoolwork.
What is more, it is no secret to anyone that in the past due to the lack of technology children spend most of the time on their education, but nowadays by entering the cell phone or online gamed children do not like to spend time on education since they can learn how to communicate with each other. To be more specific, it is believed that by many people that in the last decade, people have been looking for ways to improve the connection between each other. In this regards, the more children play online games with each other, the more they can increase their relationship with together. Thus, instead of focusing on their education and spend time on their lessons at the school, they like to create a relationship with each other. In this vein, playing online games help them to reach a specific goal because they cannot improve the connection at the school sine they should spend their time on learning new courses.
Furthermore, if students spend the most time on online games, they cannot focus on their education and will be a difficult task for them to complete their education, which means that they lose their productivity and cannot concentrate on their learning. It is worth bearing in mind that children from all corner of the globe are susceptible to many online games, and it hurts their brain and creativity. Thus, not only through the online playing games, they lose their time and cannot succeed in their education but also they lose the best moments of their time, and the productivity will be decreased.
In conclusion, given the reasons mentioned, I firmly hold an opinion that in this complicated world where we live by entering the new technology in our life especially in our children's' life, it has a notorious impact on their education and they do not like to spend time on their learning. This is because if ones spend their time on doing online games, they lose their productivity and because every child wants to communicate with others they find the videogames and play with each other, so by this way they lose the best time which could spend on education and learning useful courses.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 465, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e the connection between each other. In this regards, the more children play online ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2759.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 575.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79826086957 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51284428276 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401739130435 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 845.1 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.217874764 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.294117647 100.406767564 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8235294118 20.6045352989 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27640919753 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111039515178 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582045442212 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17392554259 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043337645862 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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