Some adults believe that nowadays children’s behavior is worse than children’s behavior was in the past. These adults have suggested three actions that parents can do to help children ages 5–10 behave better (for example, by speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward other children). Which ONE action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children’
There are some moot points about actions that parents can do toward their children to believe better. The question of which options are the best has aroused as a subject of controversy among authorities. Everyone has their own zeitgeist. When it comes to my position, I strongly subscribe to the viewpoint that limiting some types of television programs and movies which children can watch, have the most positive effect on children’s behavior. I have some reasons two of which will be explicated hereunder.
The first reason worth discussing here is that nowadays, due to fast the technology advancement, there are too many television channels. Each channel has their own idiosyncrasy and plays a different program. Some of these programs are not becoming for children and have an adverse impact in their behavior consequently, due to lacking any limitation in the television program, parents should restrict some program which is not suitable for their kids. Some kinds of these tv shows play a horrible and active movie which is not beneficial for some ranges of kids, therefore, parents should be banned their children from watching these kinds of tv shows. As a case in the point, I vividly remember, when I was a child, I watched a movie about detective Poaro, who detected criminal action, this movie led to some aggressive action in my behavior. My mother after that decided to proscribe this movie for me because this tv show had an adverse impact on my treatment. My own experience competently corroborates this idea that limiting some kind of tv program is very beneficial for children’s behavior.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned is that, scientist claim that unsuitable programs have a detrimental impact in our children’s psyche. Thus these kinds of shows change mental aspects in our kids and foster some negative treatment in children. Owing to psych effects are permanent, therefore, give rise to unfavorable manner toward children in the past. My personal example demonstrates this reality. Two days ago I watched a program which conducts in BBC channel. In that program, some researcher set up an experiment to evaluate the rate of criminal behavior between children with 5-10 years old. The result showed children who watched 5-8 hours a day committed crime 15% more than who watched fewer times. My own example shed some light to the point that tv shows raise bad behavior between kids and should be prevented with parents.
In the nutshell, The better way to alter children’s behavior toward the past is that parents should be banned their children from watching some television program and tv shows. These kinds of the program not only, increase adverse behavior in our children but also fortify criminal activity among kids.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 466, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this tv' or ''?
Suggestion: this tv;
... suitable for their kids. Some kinds of these tv shows play a horrible and active movie ...
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Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, therefore, thus, kind of, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2345.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13129102845 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78008042285 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503282275711 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.956211202 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.590909091 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7727272727 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31130338615 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991386643183 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871505713853 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236755327329 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368022203216 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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