The government has a fund to invest in children's education. There are three choices:
1.hire more teachers
2.provid e preschool education
3.Provide additional training for teachers, so they can know moremethods to teach
choose one an explain why.
There are some moot points about the best way for improving children’s education. The question of which area is the best for government funding has aroused as a subject of controversy among academicians. When it comes to my position, with weighing up the pros and the cons, I strongly subscribe to the point that making preschool education before the kindergarten mandatory is the best way for investment. I have some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be aptly explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that needless to say, children are ready for learning everything. Preschool is very beneficial for kids because in this kind of schools children can familiar with the school environment and are ready for mandatory school. Before obligation school, children always are in touch with their family and have not any experience with being in class and struggle with other people, therefore, these schools will simulate real schools for kids. As a case in the point, I vividly remember when I was a primary school student due to I spent some time in the preschool I was familiar with primary school environment and had no difficulties about that but, my friends who had not any experience about this kind of school stick in the catastrophic situation and this issue led to decreasing his ability to learn new things at the beginning of primary school. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that funding in the preschool has a great impact on children.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned here is research shows that juveniles who participate in preschool before their compulsory schools will be more successful at the university in the future. Scholars assert that these students can manage their study better than who don’t spend preschools. My personal example demonstrates this reality my sister and my cousin are in the same age. My sister passed the preschool when she was six years old on the contrary, my cousin did not participate in the preschool because he was very playful and any preschool did not accept him. Now my sister is very prospered in her major and is a top student at the college but, my cousin could not attend the university until now! My personal example shed some light to the point that preschool is very fruitful for kids and ameliorate their ability.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate, government fund in preschool is very lucrative for students because of not only familiar them with mandatory school but also, increase their learning ability. Thus, the government should invest in this area.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 299, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
...ool. Before obligation school, children always are in touch with their family and have not...
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Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...ents can manage their study better than who don't spend preschools. My persona...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, kind of, on the contrary, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03619909502 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80346230814 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484162895928 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.182582347 48.9658058833 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.125 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.625 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110801293898 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498208059563 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327018858651 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802406002521 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205777440924 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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