Some jobs can pay high salaries but require employees to leave their family and friends. Other jobs pay few salaries but allow employees to stay with family and friends. Which job do you perfer and why?
In human life, the choice of job between money and life always is a hot issue. Some people think how much money they can earn is most important, whereas others support that the balance of lives and jobs is more essential than money. In my perspectives, I believe that living with friends and family is much significant to me for a couple of reasons. I will explore the reasons in the following essay.
First of all, the main reason why people need to work is that we need to pay our physical power or knowledge to exchange money to live. In such a concept, the most vital thing is how to use the money to create a beautiful life, living with family and friend, but not how much money that we could earn in the job. I think that if we only care about the money, we reverse entirely the concept that money is because of the need of life. If we forget this, the money is useless no matter how many salaries we have, because, at that time, money is only the number, and it only makes a change in the number of the bank account.
Second, having a good life such as competing with friends or enjoying weekends with family could help people have a much great performance at work. According to research conducted by Executive Yuan in my country, the efficiency of workers associated with their emotion. In the study, workers with the much good life of experience will have higher efficiency, over 15%, than who feel alone. In fact, the contributing factor lies in the fact that workers cannot perform well under the strict stress and lonely environment without friend and family. Working in an uneasy condition will limit workers' concentrate when they are at work in a long time.
To sum up, I am of the opinion that we should not put the money in the first place when we are considering a job. Friends and family are always stand in front of the money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, well, whereas, i think, in fact, such as, first of all, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45588235294 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31164308915 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532352941176 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2341325113 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125445248405 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452161512819 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347085605342 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.084502824518 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029936826797 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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