Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Getting a high academic performance is always the goal for school-age children to pursue. Some parent offer their children money for the good grade in the school, while other parent may not do so. In my opinion, it is a good idea to offer money to children who perform well in the school.
First of all, children like to be praised and giving them scholarship is one of the way to express the commendation. It is obvious that people all want to get some return when they do put their efforts on works or academics. Needless to say that children also need feedback for their hard-working on their schoolwork. Children who get good grades must devote themselves to their lessons so that they desired the rewards and money can be one of the rewards.
Another point is that by offering children money when they get good grades, children will prepare their schoolwork well spontaneously. Studying is a long and boring process, some children may become lazy to do their schoolwork or disturbed by other things. However, the offer of the scholarship will provide a motivation for children to study automatic in order to get the reward which means that parent need not to spend time on asking their children study or overseeing their schoolwork.
Last but not least, providing money for high grades can improve the concept of managing financial for children. It is essential for school-age children to have the ability to save money or control their spend. Parent can teach their children how to manage their scholarship and also inspire their children to keep or deposit their own money.
In conclusion, I totally agree that it is a good idea for parents to offer money to their school-age children for their high grade. This behavior can briefly express their commendation for their children's hardworking. Furthermore, it saves the time for parent to spend on their children's schoolwork.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spend'?
Suggestion: spend
...reward which means that parent need not to spend time on asking their children study or ...
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Line 9, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to spend on their childrens schoolwork.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, furthermore, however, may, so, well, while, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93730407524 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64985792727 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470219435737 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8386907762 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4375 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9375 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434155725361 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.19312129556 0.076458572812 253% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103127299295 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307063499535 0.150856017488 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981192110502 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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