Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The question is debatable whether it is a good kind of motivation to pay money for every high mark a child has at school or not. While some parents use this method and provide their own reasons for this, others stay away from this by saying that money may have a negative impact on children. I do not find anything wrong in giving money if a child is good at school.
Firstly, this method shows that each work and job should be paid. Since the primary duty of children is going to school, and we can compare this occupation as adults go work, paying money show the correlation between money and their success at work. The better one performs one’s work, the more money he can receive for this. Also, it is a kind of method to show what that in their future children should do well at their work to be highly-paid.
Secondly, money can be a good motivation for children. How can parents bring some interest for their child to study a subject the last one does not want? They can talk about this, force a child to do his homework, spend hours by explaining this subject, but money can be a good alternative. For example, if a child works hard to succeed at school, parents can encourage him to continue to study well. Hence, if a child had always been bad at math, and then one day he got A+, parents can motivate him to follow this track. In his turn, a child will do his best, because this way he can save the money to buy what he wants.
Moreover, since parents usually give their children pocket money, why do not give it for something? This way, children will learn the value of money and will spend it intelligently. By giving money only for good marks, parents show that they receive their money by working hard. That is why, in the future a child, probably, will not be capricious in the shop while asking for a expensive toy.
To sum up, in my personal opinion there are obvious advantages in the idea to give some money for having high marks at school, that is why I support this method of educating.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.408 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26650979849 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498666666667 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0555115337 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8333333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334798770412 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126941485531 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614649541475 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224009048384 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627101783091 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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