Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The reward-punishment psychology theory is very famous around the world. Since an infant, we apprehend that if we do something exciting the parents will laugh or clap and show happiness expression, therefore, the baby now what to do to attract their parent attention. There is a huge debate about giving a reward for achieving certain accomplishment, some argue that it motivates children to put their best effort whereas the other thinks it will affect the children personality since they will associate money for every obligatory activity that they’ve done. I personally disagree with the provided statement because several reasons I would like elaborate in the next paragraph.
The money given practice will educate kids that work hard and being perseverance in front of adversity is for material possession instead their own good. The children who get a prize either in the form of money or extravagant game console connects the success and the hard work with something they get. The midnight study does not mean they gain new knowledge or practice their skill to support their future occupation but to get a temporary pleasure. They lost the bigger picture, that effort is more important than the result.
Additionally, the practice of effort-reward system may continue to their adulthood. They finish the job only if it offers the highest salary without considering the advantage for other or if it detrimental to the environment. As long as he or she benefit from it, they will execute the plan. In a long run, it may produce a corruptor or a convict. The kids also build an aversion to another obligatory job such as cleaning classroom or house chores since they do not get a reward from it.
Finally, the money involves to fund such a practice may eventually insufficient. After a while, a kid will ask a higher reward for more significant accolades. They may become a gold medalist of physics Olympiad or get an admission at a prestigious university and ask for a car or substantial amount of money. Consequently, the parents put aside the essential need in order to buy their children gift. Ultimately, it accumulates to a point where they unable to fulfill their children wish. Additionally, the money should be spent on more important things such as for college tuition instead of luxurious stuff.
In conclusion, I believe gives a money to children for their high-grade need to stop. It does more harm than good. Teach the children that their hard work is for their own good will more beneficial than the practice. Therefore, in the end, they will become a successful, a humble and a competent member of the community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the hard work with something they get. The midnight study does not mean they gain ...
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Line 5, column 248, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'benefits'.
Suggestion: benefits
...o the environment. As long as he or she benefit from it, they will execute the plan. In...
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Line 8, column 32, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
... stuff. In conclusion, I believe gives a money to children for their high-grade need t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, while, as for, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2208.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99547511312 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88123393325 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536199095023 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5350860856 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52173913043 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261081731765 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708686547074 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504766559004 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151929573848 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330301842284 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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